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What do you suggest
Shall I replace the broken fence?
The protector of the home
Now tattered
Wooden blood flows from its nostrils
As it pleads for mercy
The hardened sun
The painful rain
Have played their cruel games.
What do you suggest
Shall I replace the broken fence?
Where I once sat
Riding my dreamy battle horse
Catching beetles, and storing them
In bottles of glass, now shattered
Does the past hold a place
Time to move ahead
A good riddance, or a tearful adieu?
What do you suggest
Shall I replace the broken fence?
Hiding behind which I stole those kisses
Hours used to fly as I played
And swayed with silken tresses
The fence now aloof, the memories hidden still
Flowing away in its own misty waves
Lost in the discovery, I learnt my lessons
Here in its shelter, I loved and hated.
What do you still suggest
Shall I replace the broken fence?
This Poem is shared with Imaginary Garden With Real Toads and the Prompt is Fences.
This is deep.
ReplyDeleteAh.. you do it well,writing,expressing.
Thank You Sakshi :-)
DeleteAnd swayed with silken tresses
ReplyDeleteThe fence now aloof, the memories hidden still
strong.. really strong
Simply awesome. You know what, I am still smiling, the way you write & gave those lovely tints in your poems is just sooo beautiful. I wish I could write so well :)
ReplyDeleteThanks for such wonderful words Tanya :-) I'm glad I could make you smile :-)
DeleteVery beautiful poetry.....It is painful to let go some things which got tied in our memories....
ReplyDeleteBeautiful is the word
ReplyDeleteThank You Vinisha :-)
Delete"Wooden blood flows from its nostrils
ReplyDeleteAs it pleads for mercy"
This is my favorite part as you personify the fence and have it beg. What if the fences we build take on this life of their own? The repetition in this poem shows the dilemma well.
Thanks Susan :-)
DeleteVery thoughtful poem! Interesting to think whether one should replace a broken down fence (which would now allow easy passage / represents the breaking down of barriers to me)with a new one which would put barriers in place again. An enigma indeed. Thanks for taking part in my challenge over at Real Toads. Smiles!
ReplyDeleteThank You Mary :-)
DeleteBeautiful write Green! I love the metaphor like and the imagery constantly played out throughout the whole verse!
ReplyDeleteHank
No no please don't replace the broken fence!!
ReplyDeleteI love the choice of words, specially that "wooden blood". I simply love the images:D
Thank You Sayantini :-)
DeleteOne must think it is always best to fix that which is broken, so replace it no, mend it yes. Such a wonderful place the fence has been even though it never moved.
ReplyDeleteGod bless.
Thanks Mrsupole :-)
DeleteSuch a beautiful poem! I really enjoyed the question, it could be taken a lot of ways-and the rhythm the memories, the wistfulness, I love it! :-)
ReplyDeleteThank You Sara :-)
Deletebetter leave it.. too many memories. This was wonderful! So many emotions and memories. I loved the imagery.
ReplyDelete"Here in its shelter, I loved and hated!" Wow man..its too cute..I loved this one, seriously. :)
ReplyDeleteThank You Dark Angel :-)
DeleteYes, replace it with bigger, better and build bigger and better (happy) memories :)
ReplyDeleteThat's a nice advice :-)
DeleteInteresting question: shall I replace the broken fence? So much hangs upon the answer. Well done!!!!
ReplyDeleteThanks Sherry :-)
DeleteI really like your approach to the prompt!
ReplyDeleteThank You Mama Zen :-)
DeleteThis is so beautiful and at the same time really sad. Awesome job with the prompt!
ReplyDeleteThanks Laura :-)
DeleteFix the fence, you'll never know what it will bring you next! Love this poem. Such a lyrical quality here.
ReplyDeleteThanks a lot for visiting :-)
Delete... try to rebuild, but you can only try for so often ... estimate and then chose what to do ... I'll be there ... whatever decision who make ...
ReplyDeleteVery well crafted...and thoughtful:)
ReplyDeletebeautiful...and yes you may....very interesting....
ReplyDeleteThanks Sreeja :-)
DeleteThis ... is incredible.
ReplyDeleteThank You Helen :-)
DeleteSo so good!
ReplyDeletewrapped in solitude
Thanks Gautami :-)
DeleteLove how it keeps asking "Shall I replace the broken fence?" "Wooden blood flows from its nostrils" This personification works so well. Great job!
ReplyDeleteThank You Susie :-)
DeleteWhat an interesting question and all it brings forth. Loved the personal voice here. I might have to borrow this style I like it so much.
ReplyDeleteThanks Margaret :-)
DeleteLove the life you gave to that old fence...don't replace it! Very well written poem.
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