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Superficial gloss,
Camouflaging deception,
Torturing the heart.
Wicked mind awaits,
Glossy surface stirs evil,
Goodness blindfolded.
This Haiku is shared with Haiku Heights and the Prompt is Gloss.
Deep.
ReplyDeleteThanks Susan :-)
Deleteahhh stirring ... like this one very very nice
ReplyDeleteThank You :-)
DeleteVery sad.... goodness blindfolded. Nice take on this prompt!
ReplyDeleteThanks Barbara :-)
DeleteLoved the take! Very nicely weaved, the thoughts around the words!
ReplyDeleteNice thoughts but if you will permit my honest comments: I think its best that you describe a single clear image, instead of general idea like evil and goodness ~
ReplyDeleteThink of it like a brush, capturing the color and shape of a specific image in the canvas like this:
black crow awaits
fallen apples, sweet and glossy,
autumn leaves cry
~ Hope you don't mind ~
Grace,
Deletejust curious -- is the traditional haiku form describing a single image rather than general concepts? I know I don't follow anything other than my own amusement but I'm always interested in the theory.
It seems to me that the general/philosophical statements leave it more open for others to project thoughts and feelings.
That's a beautiful rendition Grace. Thanks for this wonderful insight. I will try to capture the colors rather than the image in the future :-)
DeleteHi Judith,
DeleteThe traditional form of haiku does follow a single image and not the general concept. Haiku should be left open to interpretations by the readers. Thanks for visiting :-)
I like the lines "Superficial gloss,
ReplyDeleteCamouflaging deception" Serious thoughts.
Thanks Ellecee :-)
Deleteoooooo, these are painfully good.
ReplyDeletePainfully good!!! Wow :-)
DeleteAs Grace also said 'maybe not the evil and goodness theme', but I love the haiku set really.
ReplyDeleteThanks Kristjaan :-)
DeleteSuch is the power and reach of gloss. Great writing.
ReplyDeleteThank You Sandy :-)
DeleteVery good. It has a "ripped from the headlines" feel to it.
ReplyDeleteThanks Patti :-)
DeleteSad, deep and poignant checking under the skin.
ReplyDeleteThank You Dulcina :-)
Deletereal deep insights in there..good work :)
ReplyDeleteThanks Sanjana :-)
DeleteSurely the girl in the picture is the protestor/victim not the perpetrator/evil?!! Reminds me of the free speech movement and protest against hypocrisy that gave birth to some 60s music like the Stones "Sympathy for the Devil." Great gloss.
ReplyDeleteAll the time I was thinking of lip gloss. So, your set of haiku just grabbed me. I went another direction, though.
ReplyDeleteLoved your haiku!
Thank You Mariya :-)
DeleteVery deep and intense!! I loved it! Lies, deception, evil.. Juicy stuff!
ReplyDeleteooo er :( That's a strong one .
ReplyDeleteThank You Tigerbrite :-)
Delete1st one just Awesome! :)
ReplyDeleteThanks Simran :-)
Deletesad but powerful take on the prompt..
ReplyDeleteThank You Odyzz :-)
Delete'Goodness blindfolded.' Nice but it's always sad to hear that. You wrote it brilliantly. :)
ReplyDeleteThank You buddy :-)
DeleteSuperficial gloss!! I like it!
ReplyDeleteGloss is what we put on something (lips, lies) to make it look better.
ReplyDeleteLost Gloss
Yeah :-)
Deletestrong one
ReplyDeleteThank You Vinisha :-)
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