Sunday, September 09, 2012

Gloss

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Superficial gloss,
Camouflaging deception,
Torturing the heart.

Wicked mind awaits,
Glossy surface stirs evil,
Goodness blindfolded.


This Haiku is shared with Haiku Heights and the Prompt is Gloss.




46 comments:

  1. ahhh stirring ... like this one very very nice

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  2. Very sad.... goodness blindfolded. Nice take on this prompt!

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  3. Loved the take! Very nicely weaved, the thoughts around the words!

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  4. Nice thoughts but if you will permit my honest comments: I think its best that you describe a single clear image, instead of general idea like evil and goodness ~

    Think of it like a brush, capturing the color and shape of a specific image in the canvas like this:

    black crow awaits
    fallen apples, sweet and glossy,
    autumn leaves cry

    ~ Hope you don't mind ~

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    1. Grace,
      just curious -- is the traditional haiku form describing a single image rather than general concepts? I know I don't follow anything other than my own amusement but I'm always interested in the theory.

      It seems to me that the general/philosophical statements leave it more open for others to project thoughts and feelings.

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    2. That's a beautiful rendition Grace. Thanks for this wonderful insight. I will try to capture the colors rather than the image in the future :-)

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    3. Hi Judith,
      The traditional form of haiku does follow a single image and not the general concept. Haiku should be left open to interpretations by the readers. Thanks for visiting :-)

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  5. I like the lines "Superficial gloss,
    Camouflaging deception" Serious thoughts.

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  6. As Grace also said 'maybe not the evil and goodness theme', but I love the haiku set really.

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  7. Such is the power and reach of gloss. Great writing.

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  8. Very good. It has a "ripped from the headlines" feel to it.

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  9. Sad, deep and poignant checking under the skin.

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  10. real deep insights in there..good work :)

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  11. Surely the girl in the picture is the protestor/victim not the perpetrator/evil?!! Reminds me of the free speech movement and protest against hypocrisy that gave birth to some 60s music like the Stones "Sympathy for the Devil." Great gloss.

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  12. All the time I was thinking of lip gloss. So, your set of haiku just grabbed me. I went another direction, though.
    Loved your haiku!

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  13. Very deep and intense!! I loved it! Lies, deception, evil.. Juicy stuff!

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  14. ooo er :( That's a strong one .

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  15. sad but powerful take on the prompt..

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  16. 'Goodness blindfolded.' Nice but it's always sad to hear that. You wrote it brilliantly. :)

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  17. Superficial gloss!! I like it!

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  18. Gloss is what we put on something (lips, lies) to make it look better.

    Lost Gloss

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