Sunday, January 13, 2013

Don't Throw Away My Paradise

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Don't throw away my paradise
I'll cover my truth with your lies
We have been stupid, now let's think wise
Please please please, don't throw away my paradise

Shut the door
Let's talk more
Love isn't a game
'm sorry, 'm ashamed
We can turn it around
I can't lose what I found
Just one more chance 
Baby, don't kill this romance

Don't throw away my paradise
I'll cover my truth with your lies
We have been stupid, now let's think wise
Please please please, don't throw away my paradise

The key in the lock
Oh am still in a shock
Listen to my tears
Welled up with thousand fears
The moon won't sing
I lost my wing
I can't fly now
I want you back, but don't know how

Don't throw away my paradise
I'll cover my truth with your lies
We have been stupid, now let's think wise
Please please please, don't throw away my paradise

Roses aren't red
Blossoms now dead
Sun wouldn't rise
I paid the price
Cut off my chest
Quick, do haste
A gaping hole within
These wounds I can never clean

Don't throw away my paradise
I'll cover my truth with your lies
We have been stupid, now let's think wise
Please please please, don't throw away my paradise








76 comments:

  1. No words enough to praise this one...the intensity it holds and the passion it follows..amazing..

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    1. Thanks buddy ... I am glad you liked it :-)

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  2. It can be transformed into a nice song...lovely :)

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  3. 'Don't throw away my paradise' is such a strong line..how fragile it is..how it often relies on the hands of another..a poem in itself..

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  4. What a desperate and heart felt plea. Marvelous.

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  5. Wow, Just WOW.
    Very Well written. :)

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  6. I agree with Sayantini. It really would make a beautiful song :)

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    1. That's my plan ... let's hope for the best ;-)

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  7. Wow! lovely!!...full of emotions...Even I agree, It can become a beautiful song!! :)

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    1. Thanks Valli ... I guess I should really start composing it in my guitar now :-)

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  8. this is def lyrical...you really need to get someone to put a guitar riff to it...it carries the emotion well...

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    1. Yeah .... I will try composing it :-)

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  9. Such a heartfelt composition!

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  10. A desperate call to save love. superb!! Moon is a constant companion of your poems. Now I kind of search it in between the lines.

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    1. May be 'cause I am a moon person :-)

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  11. jae Rose said it best...it is a great line...excelent writing

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  12. I love the, "Roses aren't red, blossoms now dead," and then who can forget, don't throw away my paradise.." WOW! This was simply beautiful and stunning.. but haunting too.. I loved it! You are amazing!

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  13. I agree with Brian, this should be set to music... such beautiful lyrics.

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    1. I sure would try my best ... thanks Tigerbrite :-)

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  14. i hope this doesn't have to do anything with your reality.
    you're an amazing writer. Everything you say expresses itself beautifully. Keep writing!

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    1. Thanks so much buddy ... and ya, it's a work of fiction. Resemblance to any character, living or dead, is purely coincidental ;-)

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  15. Wow, Mr. G ... this piece is exquisite ... so beautiful ... trust me (and my skin), because you and your poem gave me goose bumps ... and made me cry. If I could ... I would give you a gold star and ... wings ... Fly, Jonathan, fly. Love, cat.

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    1. Oops ... I am so sorry if it made you cry, my friend ... this is just a piece of my imagination :-)

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    2. I will not believe that this piece solely came from your imagination ... When I write my pieces, they are always based on a pic I discovered somewhere ... but there is always a grain of truth to my creation ... a grain of personal experience ... that touches the heart ... that's when poetry comes alive and pushes the readers ahead and beyond boundaries ... In order to grow towards a new level of maturity. That's my mindset, and I hope it's yours too, Mr. G ... and if not yet, it should be your goal ... So again ... Fly, Jonathan, fly ... You will safe souls with your gift ... including mine, Love, cat.

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    3. Thanks for such lovely words Cat ... keep smiling :-)

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  16. Speck...This made a very good read. Very realistic... passionate..so very beautiful:)

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  17. Wow... the desperation so stark, "I'll cover my truth with your lies..." Very powerful.

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  18. Beautiful. It feels like a song.

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  19. Wow! I'm sure that you've spoken the words of many hearts today :)

    And I completely agree with Nara, it does feel like a song!

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  20. Green Speck, this is one of my favorites of yours, I think.(I like your longer works!) It shows the tension when the relationship is over. Often it is harder for one person than for the other. If one has 'paradise' in one's mind, it is so hard to leave it behind. I also want to thank you for joining Poetry Pantry. I hope you will return on Wednesday when we have prompts & also consider adding your name to our blogroll!

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    1. Thank You so much Mary .... surely I would return on Wednesday for the prompt :-)

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  21. This poem is very lyrical. A song is playing in my head with these words. Aweome Green Speck!

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  22. A powerful and lyrical write. Excellent.

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  23. This would indeed make for a powerful song. full of passion rhythm and flow.

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  24. riveting piece of desperation

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    1. I am glad I was able to express :-)

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  25. I want to sing it! Except I'm not a good singer! Beautiful! x

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  26. Desperate love...Beautiful!!

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  27. I like the repetition and flow ~ It made me think of how far we will go to keep one's paradise (even with lies) ~

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    1. Perhaps we all wish to preserve our paradises :-)

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  28. The repeated refrain adds power to the piece that feels like the final plea, on bended knee. Quite emotional.

    http://www.kimnelsonwrites.com/2013/01/13/feckless/

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  29. amazingly beautiful -so lovely

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  30. Your poem has so much intensity! I found myself holding my breath as I read feeling the pain in the words!

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  31. its pretty amazing..!!!
    a real haiku
    poulomi

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