Sunday, October 18, 2015

Scribble It Black



scribble scribble scribble
and scribble it black
till the walls don't break
and the heart doesn't crack
noises in the corridor
piles dumped on the rack
I'm your nemesis
I shall surely come back

you've always feared
and worried by your fate
counting all the reasons
throwing wisdom out of the gate
and when finally you realize
it's already too late
you are your nemesis
responsible for this state


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86 comments:

  1. You are your own nemesis...thought provoking!

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  2. Great rhyme, and a brilliant piece. Greetings friend!

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  3. Of course liked the deepens through simple words

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  4. We can all be our own worst enemies... :-)

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  5. This has a somewhat menacing feel to it as if that inner voice is taking over much more than it should. I enjoyed your poem...thanks for sharing.

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  6. I like the response to that image...nicely done.

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  7. Wise words! And a lovely rhythm, too.

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  8. Rhythmic chaos and truth. Well done.

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  9. Full of wisdom and depth! Wonderful write.

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  10. "Till the wall doesnt break and the hearts dont crack"....loved those lines. Very thought-provoking, that we are our own nemesis.....so true.

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  11. To be your own nemesis.. that's all too common alas... and it's like a scribbled soul

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  12. You know these ring games we played as children, some call it rhymes. Your poem can easily pass for one because of the flow allowing for clapping and perhaps dancing. ;) Silly I know.

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  13. Wow! So hop skip and jump! Nemesis enjoys itself, especially when it is embedded in its own subject. Perfect!

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  14. well done-we are our own worst enemies !

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  15. Oh, nicely dark, lol. The first verse in particular moves along crisply.

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  16. So true, I think. We are EACH our own nemesis. Sad but true.

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  17. For those that have a choice I might agree but seeing the catastrophe occurring in the Middle East and the mass of refugees fleeing their homeland I wonder.

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  18. Loved this poem. Anger, vengeance often makes one dump all wisdom and it may get too late before one realizes it.

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  19. 'you are your own nemesis' - just perfect, and rhymed well.

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  20. I loved the unique thought... Nice one!

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  21. Look at yourself before you blame others! Excellent.

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  22. "You are your own nemesis" SPOT ON!

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  23. We are indeed our own worst enemies - a poem Edgar Allen Poe would be proud of

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  24. Like how wisely you included the famous proverb in the story, her 'nemesis' works as a boomerang.

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  25. love the realization in the end!

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  26. Finely crafted, skillfully written...

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  27. Personal responsibility, no one else to blame!

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  28. You always manage to get across a message through your writing! :)

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  29. We are alwAys our own worst enemy.

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  30. Your mind vomits wonderful lines,Amrit.

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  31. Short, crisp and to the point.. with the message loud and clear!

    Cheers

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  32. Funny thing, we do often feel just like this, or well I have! Perfect response!

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  33. Scribble it black reminds me of Paint it Black by the Rolling Stones.

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  34. so true.. we are our own nemesis. wonderful poem..

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  35. rhythmic lines calling the inner nemesis to awaken up:))

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  36. Wow..nice composition.
    Rage and Frustration, we are responsible for it to grew within us.

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  37. Just the perfect description of the prompt..!! I don't think there'd be a better version of it!

    Cheers

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