Friday, August 31, 2012

Reading Through The Words

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I look at your letters,
And see the clear blue skies,
Leaping out of the corners,
Of your beautiful eyes.

Reading through the words,
Some moist, others perfected with a smile,
Fake though, hiding the vacuum within,
Realization of me turning into a sudden vile.

I count the syllables,
Or rather, that was what I thought I was doing,
When in reality, actually,
Those were your tears I was following.

Beating against the bush, muted words,
Walking down the storm, bruised and battered,
Loneliness crept from behind, gripping me tight,
The diamond beating within, now badly shattered.

'Yours forever' - that's what you wrote,
The ink now fades, at a sickening rate,
I lock the closet, the promises safe inside,
Cursing won't help, perhaps that's my fate.

Tomorrow,
I will look at your letters again,
And see the clear blue skies,
Leaping out of the corners,
Of your beautiful eyes, yet again
I can't evade the ritual,
'cause 'm bounded in your chain,
The rough ones, cutting through my skin,
Inviting this glory of joyous pain.


This Poem is shared with Poetry Jam and the Prompt is Letters.



28 comments:

  1. The fifth stanza I thought was just about perfect...it could almost stand on its own,

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  2. This is amazing, I could feel the emotion it tried to convey. Good work :)

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  3. Its amazing, I could feel the emotion it tried to convey, good work :)

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  4. beautiful.....full of emotions.....touching.....

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  5. Sadly beautiful poem!....Poignant!!

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    1. Sometimes pain is beautiful too :-)

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  6. Your poem made me FEEL. I understand these feelings. Loving the words, but even though the love is no longer exists one has to keep reading the words again and again, unable to let go! Poignant indeed.

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  7. Wow! Such depth in your poetry ~ wonderfully created ~ Enjoy the weekend ~ (A Creative Harbor)

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  8. This is REALLY nice piece, GS.

    Written like music (which poetry IS?)
    I LIKE how you recapitulate the first words
    and then add a coda-like finish.
    So beautiful, so spiritual, so REAL!

    One thing...would you consider a slight change in the last line?

    "...Inviting this glory of joyous pain."
    Try this, then decide (Please do not destroy your meaning!)

    INVITING THIS GLORIOUS, JOYOUS PAIN
    or
    INVITING THIS JOYOUS, GLORIOUS PAIN

    Either way you change or not--I love it!
    PEACE!
    Steve

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    1. Nice suggestions Steve ... Thanks for the insight :-)

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  9. Awww..... Great letter... so sad, made me feel sad so, it has to be effective in conveying your thoughts. Well done :)

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  10. the ink now fading at a sickening rate....nice...also the syllables as tears...both great touches in this...you def hit the emotions with this one...

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  11. I found this one beautiful as well as distrubing. Some shadows here. Good response to the prompt.

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  12. The fifth stanza stands out, perhaps contains the whole poem within it. I love every word in it. Very emotional poem and response to the prompt.

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