if I were a fly
I would hide myself
from tears, yours
and guilt, mine
somewhere in your room
so that dawn gifts me
a sight of you
and dusk shall hide
those feelings still true
This Poem is shared with Poetry Jam - If I Were.
wowow! this poem is so touching and last line is very poignant..loved it :)
ReplyDeleteThanks Ankita :-)
Deletebtw, it also reminds of 'fly on the wall' song by Tattoo!
ReplyDeleteI will surely listen to it :-)
DeleteT.A.T.u*
ReplyDeleteBeautifully expressed... Love it!
ReplyDeleteeach line touches our heart to ponder awhile:))
ReplyDeleteThank You Adhi :-)
DeleteLovely verses!
ReplyDeleteThanks Ruby :-)
DeleteVery lovely imagination.
ReplyDeleteThank You :-)
Deletewow beautifully expressed with full of feelings!! :)
ReplyDeleteThanks Anjali :-)
DeleteI sense love and melancholy at the same time.
ReplyDeleteNice!
Thank You Satya :-)
Deleteouch...sweet & sad...
ReplyDeleteThanks Sumana :-)
Deleteshort and sweet..little sad too..
ReplyDeleteThank You Arathi :-)
DeleteOh, lovely really....and very poignant verse!
ReplyDeleteVisited from Poetry Jam. Smiles.
DeleteThank You Mary :-)
DeleteVery strong and yet subtle poem! Thanks for taking part.
ReplyDeleteThanks Gabriella :-)
DeleteThere is sadness in this as well as mystery. Lots in a few words.
ReplyDeleteThanks Peggy :-)
DeleteI really enjoy the approach you took with the challenge ...
ReplyDeleteThank You Helen :-)
DeleteI'm afloating along with the beautiful emotions
ReplyDeleteit carry :)
Thanks Simmi :-)
Deletecool little love poem...playful, shy....
ReplyDeleteThank You Brian :-)
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