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the sun that sinks
in the blue dissolving skies
like sugar in a teapot
or salt, if you prefer
silently bloating bubbles
that blow hot and cold
as the frozen rays pave the way
to the sands of time
oblivion to fate.
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interesting textures in this...like the contrasts of hot and cold...the fiery sun and water....the last couple lines carry the weight as well...
ReplyDeleteThank You Brian :-)
DeleteI enjoyed this. Love the idea of the sun sinking like sugar in a teapot. I can picture this.
ReplyDeleteVery emotive and evocative. "The sands of time"...inescapable sands they are.
ReplyDeleteThank You Keith :-)
Deleteinnovative imagery!!
ReplyDeleteThanks a lot buddy :-)
DeleteI like the image of dissolving sugar or salt in a teapot ~ It goes on, oblivious to our fates ~
ReplyDeleteThank You Heaven :-)
DeleteI love your opening image of the setting sun, and I am left wondering what story is yet to ensue.
ReplyDeleteThanks Kerry :-)
Deleteadore your style of writing. very different from much I've read!
ReplyDeleteThank You Linda :-)
DeleteBeautiful.
ReplyDeleteThanks Zeba :-)
Delete... never understood why to write on somebodies'/ some societies' prompt ... is it still yours when you do? Hmmm!
ReplyDeleteWell it motivates me to write more and more ... at times I feel lost without prompts :-)
DeleteYou have wonderful imagery in here. Especially like the comparison of the sunset to sugar.
ReplyDeleteThanks Teresa :-)
DeleteLove the imagery here ... a sun like melting sugar sweeter than sweet.
ReplyDeleteThank You Bjorn :-)
DeleteWell, Björn just said what I was going to say. lol. Beautiful imagery and adored "sun sinking like sugar in a teapot"!
ReplyDeleteThanks Maggie :-)
Deletesuperlative imagination GS, sugary sun melting in the teapot huh... beautiful, beautiful, beautiful:)
ReplyDeleteloved the imagery in there :)
ReplyDeleteRich imagery to savour...nice work buddy :)
ReplyDeleteThank You Sadia :-)
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ReplyDelete"the sun that sinks
in the blue dissolving skies"
I think I've rarely heard or read such a short and perfect description of a sunset.
sunsets are amazing to watch as they are swallowed up by night time or the sea
ReplyDeleteI love your description - perfect
Thank You Leslie :-)
DeleteLove the sun dissolving like sugar in a teapot...such rich imagery in this
ReplyDeleteThanks Susie :-)
DeleteI love the play on fire n' ice!
ReplyDeleteThe sugar dissolving...love this one
:D
Thank You Ella :-)
DeleteLove the salt/sugar, fire/ice, also the internal rhyme in this. The pic of the sun is perfect, but you brought out its perfection in verse, and that's really nice.
ReplyDeleteI love sunsets. Used to be, on the beach in Venice, CA, you could almost hear the sun "bloop" its last on the horizon, but now it's too noisy and gentrified. Wish I could see sunset in a more deserted clime. Thanks for the dream/wish! Amy
I hope your wish comes soon Amy :-)
DeleteThank You Loredana :-)
ReplyDeleteBeautiful images. I just love 'like sugar in a teapot.'
ReplyDeleteThanks Sara :-)
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