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Somewhere down the line
I retrace my path
And there you are.
Moments of tears
Smiles and fears
Somewhere down the line.
Running behind time
My words fail to rhyme
I retrace my path.
Love and trust
Brown eyes of thirst
And there you are.
PS: This is a poem in the cascade form, where each line of the first stanza is used in sequence as the ending line of succeeding stanzas, line one ending the second, line two the third, etc.
This Poem is shared with Sunday Mini Challenge: Chained Rhyme: Part Two.
Great!!! And this is how a poetry should be written!
ReplyDeleteWow ... that's so nice of you :-)
DeleteLovely weaving of lines ~ I specially like
ReplyDeleteMy words fail to rhyme
I retrace my path.
Thanks for linking up with Real Toads ~
Thank You so much Grace :-)
Deletegorgeous, especially the second stanza which really speaks to me
ReplyDeleteThanks Emma :-)
DeleteI love this post !!! :)) Yours. Have a nice weekend.
ReplyDeleteThank You Patrycja :-)
DeleteWhat an exceptional piece...just wow ..
ReplyDeleteThanks Sadia :-)
DeleteYou really got into the essentials of the form here--I like it best in short phrases such as you've used, as it makes the repeating lines all that much more effective--and some lovely lines they are--I especially like the final stanza. Thanks.
ReplyDeleteThank You Hedgewitch :-)
DeleteThis one is so in-line with the Valentine mood in the air these days.. loved it!
ReplyDeleteNow that you say it, I feel it too :-)
DeleteOh, I love yours! I love the repetition and how effectively you did this challenge~ <3 it :D
ReplyDeleteThanks Ella :-)
DeleteThat had a real joy of a delighted discovvery at the end.
ReplyDeleteAnd these make life beautiful :-)
DeleteBeautiful verses flow effortlessly from your pen...Simply wonderful!!
ReplyDeleteThank You Reshma ... I am glad you like my work :-)
DeleteWell done!
ReplyDeleteThanks Mama Zen :-)
DeleteAnd there you are ~ very sweet!
ReplyDeleteThank You Robyn :-)
Deletelovely words...nice lines!
ReplyDeleteThanks Kalyan :-)
Deletehello yar And there u r & my good prayers that u must b always there with ur mesmerizing heart touching poems...GOD<3U
ReplyDeleteThank You Adhi :-)
DeleteLove the movement of this one. You are such a talented poet. ;-)
ReplyDelete... and there you are. I love this!!!
ReplyDeleteThanks Helen :-)
DeleteThank You Loredana :-)
ReplyDeletebrown eyes of thirst can be maddening!!
ReplyDeletejourney with a new friend
Yes they surely are :-)
DeleteBeautiful. And feels so comforting that he (she?) is there...
ReplyDeleteI agree ... it always feels lovely :-)
DeleteI LOVE this! you made it look easy, and it is not. Well done!
ReplyDeleteThanks Sherry :-)
DeleteYes, you made this seem so easy...great piece!!
ReplyDeleteThank You Susie :-)
DeleteSo beautiful and crafty, both the form and the feeling!
ReplyDeleteThanks Meenakshi :-)
DeleteMy favorite line: "Brown eyes of thirst"
ReplyDeleteThank You Susan :-)
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