As I walk towards the vines entwined across the fence, I remember how we curled up in love on the moist grass that rainy afternoon, tears exchanged with the tip of our tongues as we bathed in the fragrance of pristine serenity.
We disobeyed the fence at times, stealing long awaited celestial moments with the stars invading our privacy.
However, we never made promises; rather, we walked our separate ways, either side of the white fence, that symbolized the barrier that had always existed between us.
The fence stands majestically even today. Can I cross the hurdle one last time?
This 100 Word Fiction is shared with Friday Fictioneers.
Very poetic writing there..
ReplyDeleteThanks Managua :-)
DeleteNow flowery words.
ReplyDeleteThank You :-)
DeleteVery poetic. I like the image of the stars invading their privacy.
ReplyDeletejanet
sigh. you are the master of passionate, poetic words.. everything, from your haiku to your stories. loved it! ^^ and it's a great story.. i love romance.. maybe he will cross the hurdle and never have to go back.. or they could break the fence entirely ^^
ReplyDeleteWhatever they do, I hope they do not have to regret later :-)
DeleteI like this work!
ReplyDeleteThanks Sandy :-)
DeleteIt was a very lovely romantic piece.. I like the last sentence though.. "Can I cross the hurdle one last time?" Very poignant..
ReplyDeleteThank You Crystal :-)
DeleteSo romantic and magical....
ReplyDeleteThanks Sreeja :-)
DeleteBeautiful story, like a scene in a romantic movie...
ReplyDeleteThank You Valli :-)
DeleteMy favorite, hands down, you have written! Sad. Beautiful. Accurate for many, no doubt. Resonates.
ReplyDeleteVery preety little story.
ReplyDeleteThe divide is beautifully portrayed, the connection too.
You should take even writing stories seriously.
Keep writing :)
I will try for sure :-)
DeleteJust one word, BRAVO !! You write such intense pieces, see I told you tum dhoom macha doge, hehe !! AN impeccable micro-fiction... Yeah ! Cross that hurdle & come on the other side of the fence !! :) This was super cool !
ReplyDeleteThank you so much Tanya ... and as you know, your micro-fictions really are an inspiration to me :-)
DeleteI like 'star invading privacy'. You are a magician with words, Amrit. Stunning write up.
ReplyDeleteThanks Meenakshi :-)
DeleteDear Green Speck,
ReplyDeleteYou presented some lovely imagery in the piece. You may correct me if I'm wrong but I saw the fence, the hurdle, as a symbol of commitment. Nice writing in any case.
Shalom,
Rochelle
Thanks for interpreting it so beautifully Rochelle :-)
DeleteA very good addition to our ranks. I have not read your writing beofre, so welcome if you are new and welcome if I have just missed doing so before.
ReplyDeleteI am new to your blog Dobson ... thanks for the warm welcome :-)
DeleteNice writing! I love the phrase "celestial moments." It makes me pause, to ponder what that means. Nice work!
ReplyDeleteI hope you didn't have to pause for long ;-)
Deletereal life will always be better than reel life :)
ReplyDeleteYeah ... I agree :-)
DeleteYour choice of words made the micro-fiction poetic..."Stars invading privacy" is such a nice phrase...Fabulous write-up!!
ReplyDeleteVery romantic and tender.
ReplyDeleteThank You Claire :-)
DeleteThere's always time for one last kiss, until there's not. Don't hesitate.
ReplyDeleteYes :-)
Deletevery nice / love the symbol (barrier) of the fence
ReplyDeleteThanks Moondustwriter :-)
Deletea nice piece, approaching poetry
ReplyDeleteThank You :-)
Deletepretty haiku, soothing.
ReplyDelete:-)
DeleteNow this is what i love about your writing....comprehensive n deep enough to drown the reader......i drowned thrice ...hehe
ReplyDeleteWow ... and I love your comments so much ... they really make me believe I can write :-)
DeleteSo poetic... Loved it!!!
ReplyDeleteThanks Satya :-)
DeleteWonder what the hurdle is?
ReplyDeleteSomething tricky here perhaps ;-)
DeleteNice to see you here as well. It's a lovely piece of poetic prose you have here.
ReplyDeleteBjorn
Thank You Bjorn :-)
Deleteoh nice! Its very Romeo and Juliet! love it.
ReplyDeleteThanks Bo :-)
DeleteBeautiful words. I really enjoyed this.
ReplyDeleteThank You El :-)
DeleteBarriers, barriers!
ReplyDeleteWell done!
Thanks a lot :)
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