Tuesday, February 05, 2013

New Dawn, Again



a few coins
enough for survival
smile in his eyes

desolate figure
weary of hunger
counts the stars

a shooting star
time for the last wish
he finds none

fake promises
he swallows his tears
makes not a fuss

miserable world
bound by selfishness
he walks alone

scattered dreams
encased in frail bust
too scared to lose

sweet dew drops
hold on to rosy petals
he looks at the bee

brows straight
he searches for nectar
with the bee

time passes
his interest fades
thirst rises

prove to me
that you exist, he shouts
towards the heaven

rain God
lets go of the rein
clouds obey

faith restored
he walks back his path
new dawn, again



This Haiku is shared with The Sunday Whirl.







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  1. Vaishali Jain2/05/2013 01:08:00 am

    Beautiful, Amrit! WOW! One of the best I've read so far. Each and every haiku set talks of the truth that prevails in the society and the human needs. It talks about desire, want, faith and so much more.

    Words skillfully used. Wow, again! :D

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  2. Panchali2/05/2013 01:19:00 am

    WOW....The best one for me is:

    'prove to me
    that you exist, he shouts
    towards the heaven'--Hats off! :D

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  3. Reshma2/05/2013 01:46:00 am

    A whirl of human emotions brought out beautifully!!

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  4. Eliz Frank2/05/2013 04:05:00 am

    This a powerful new dawn and I plan to join it. :-)

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  5. SandyCarlson2/05/2013 07:35:00 am

    I love the story you have constructed here.

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  6. Woman'n'Beyond2/05/2013 08:23:00 am

    "scattered dreams
    encased in frail bust
    too scared to lose"

    and

    prove to me
    that you exist, he shouts
    towards the heaven

    wonderful story of loosing and finding faith told in crisp words. wonderful set of haiku!

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  7. Unspoken2/05/2013 09:49:00 am

    desolate figure
    weary of hunger
    counts the stars

    I love this!

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  8. Sadia Khan2/05/2013 12:22:00 pm

    One wow wont be enough for this one....it took my breath away...u r a magician with words...hats off to your art :)

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  9. Optimistic Existentialist2/05/2013 06:14:00 pm

    Once again, your poem ends with a message of hope :)

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  10. Aqsa Manzoor2/07/2013 03:30:00 pm

    You have mixed the reality with optimism perfectly!

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  11. Sara McNulty2/09/2013 01:58:00 am

    Seamless and beautiful use of prompt.

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