I cherished the sunset as you hid the flowers behind your teenage frame, enticing me to the scent of the blooming reds.
However, over the years, I couldn't feel the same aromatic essence of roses; perhaps I missed the scent of your freshly bathed body, the wet hair sticking out from under your cap, lurking somewhere in the distant corner.
I look at the sun today and it's hidden behind the clouds, of shame, despair and loss.
Ten years without you and the world has started rotating without me; can't you see how much I yearn for you?
I muster grit and dial his number.
This 5 Sentence Micro-Fiction is shared with Five Sentence Fiction and he Prompt is Cherish.
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ReplyDeleteThanks Ali :-)
DeleteA person once cherished is never forgotten! Nice.
ReplyDeleteHopeless romanticism always shines through in your posts :)
ReplyDeleteThanks Keith :-)
DeleteDrenched in love, deeply, madly, badly!
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Deleteyou really shouldn't have mentioned about the five sentence thing! because this is complete in itself!!! As it turns out, it has a weird co-incidence with what I feel right now... Well written man...
ReplyDeleteThanks so much buddy :-)
DeleteBeautifully told tale. Very well done.
ReplyDeleteThank You McGuffy :-)
DeletePerfect for the season of the Valentine! I drove my teenage grandson to his (first) girlfriend's home yesterday afternoon. Chocolates and stuffed animal in hand. My heart burst with so many emotions ... pride, yearning for life to treat him kindly ... love.
ReplyDeleteWow ... a great grandson and her grandmom :-)
DeleteHow elegantly you captured the emotional complexity in just a few sentences, Speck. Lovely!
ReplyDeleteThanks Panchali Di :-)
DeleteSimply fabulous!! The image and the lines capture the flavor of the season so beautifully that one does not realize its micro-fiction...
ReplyDeleteThank You Reshma :-)
Deletewhose number?
ReplyDeleteYou write some amazing stuffs!!
"His" number :-P
DeleteThat was extremely romantic ! elegance dripping from each line . I guess poets write fiction better . There is an added charm to a poet's words , i feel . loved this one ! :)
ReplyDeleteYour fictions inspire me to write Maliny ... I just love your stories !!!
DeleteHow heartbreaking it is to lose the one you love. Very good!
ReplyDeleteIt is sad !!!
DeleteA wonderful write
ReplyDeleteThanks Celestine :-)
DeleteSo heartbreaking and sad; even after ten years, her pain is as if it was yesterday.Beautifully descriptive and I love the use of the picture. Lovely writing. x
ReplyDeleteThank You Lizzie :-)
DeleteWe never really forget true loves...always wondering... Great piece!
ReplyDeleteThanks Lisa :-)
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