she could have -
waded through her tears
glided past her fears
played with the tide
paved a joyous ride
then, without a trace, she sank
drowning in dream, sadly blank
lost in waves, her innocent whim
she tried
but could never learn to swim
This Poem is shared with Poets United Midweek Motif - Swimming.
glided past her fears
played with the tide
paved a joyous ride
then, without a trace, she sank
drowning in dream, sadly blank
lost in waves, her innocent whim
she tried
but could never learn to swim
This Poem is shared with Poets United Midweek Motif - Swimming.
This is beautiful Amrit, dont know if i can say i relate to it or was it deja vu.
ReplyDeleteThanks Shweta :-)
Deleteo! Wonderful Poem--a crisp capture, using the motif powerfully!
ReplyDeleteThank You Susan :-)
DeleteHolds true for not just drowning in water but other life problems too :-/
ReplyDeleteI agree :-)
Deleteyou have used beautiful imagery and words to motivate through verses ...loved it!
ReplyDeleteThanks Ankita :-)
DeleteI love the metaphors in this one, Amrit. Have a great weekend sir!!
ReplyDeleteThank You Keith :-)
DeleteThis is wordlessly beautiful.
ReplyDeletexo
Hopelessly Hopeful
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Thanks so much :-)
DeleteI feel for her.
ReplyDeleteThis was beautiful.
Thank You Red :-)
DeleteTragic... But a beautiful write
ReplyDeleteThanks Rajesh :-)
DeleteThank you for talking about the importance of choices.
ReplyDeleteMade my day.
thank you.
Thanks a lot :-)
Deletepoignant, intense & powerful....
ReplyDeleteThank You :-)
DeleteWonderful Poem and a beautiful write Amrit ji
ReplyDeleteThanks Sanjay ji :-)
DeleteI think I could never swim too...
ReplyDeleteNice
Amrit you put that drowning in sorrow into eloquent words.
ReplyDeleteSo many have felt it...
Thanks Moonie :-)
Deletea classical tragedy where the muses evoking to form the magical words to touch our hearts:) a wonderful piece:))
ReplyDeleteThank You Adhi :-)
DeletePowerfully poignant, Amrit.
ReplyDeleteThanks Celestine :-)
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