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He seemed oblivious to the green mist that threatened to entrap him in its meandering waves, thus deviating him from the true purpose of his arrival, and rendering him a failure.
However, his heart brimmed with unwavering faith and conviction, and he knew no obstacle could obstruct the sole purpose of his life now; he, the new Savior of mankind.
Time was running fast, and that's what he had to stop - yes, he was here to steal time, to avoid the inevitable, and not just delay it.
Today the phoenix would rise from its ashes, the scars would heal, and the world would bow to his acts, only if he accomplished this mission.
He had to get on with the task, and complete it before the calender turned to the fateful day, that would be tomorrow, the 21st of December, 2012.
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A modern adaptation of Noah's ark eh? very innovative, must say :) well written buddy!!
ReplyDeleteThanks buddy ... you interpreted it in a magnificent way :-)
DeleteYes, time never stops.
ReplyDeleteBut perhaps ... ;-)
DeleteTo stop time...to delay the inevitable. What an excercise in futility eh? :)
ReplyDeleteWhat if he is successful? ;-)
DeleteNice one. I like it :)
ReplyDeleteI went down the same road in Illusion of Time.
Thank You Tigerbrite :-)
DeleteThese five sentences really sums up the plot...felt just like reading a good blurb. Loved the elements of magic realism too.You have really mastered the art of writing fiction. Well done !
ReplyDeleteThanks so much S. I just try to do my best :-)
DeleteI hope he succeeds. My daughter's birthday is the 22nd.
ReplyDeleteVery dreamy.
Cheers!
JzB
Don't worry. He is there to succeed :-)
DeleteI like it very much... I'm sure we'll all wake up on the 22nd and wonder what the heck we all were thinking...lol
ReplyDeleteGreat poem :)
Hope so :-P
DeleteFve of the most amazing and wonderfully written sentences I've ever read!!! You did a great job on this!!!
ReplyDeleteThis is really a big big compliment ... thanks Crystal :-)
DeleteThere is an intense worry here, but still a hope as well....great work for the prompt Green Speck!! :-)
ReplyDeleteThanks Carrie :-)
DeleteLet's hope he succeeds in his task. Otherwise, Are we ready? Wonderful write, so suspenseful, with a touch of melancholy and much hope.
ReplyDeleteI am sure he will succeed ;-)
Deletehmm - very si-fi :-), but I like your word choice :-)
ReplyDeleteThanks Raajii :-)
DeleteNot worrying about waking up on the 22nd or 23rd or 24th. We have heard these prophecies before....just my take.
ReplyDeleteYup ... we shouldn't take these seriously :-)
DeletePowerful words I must say. Hope this new savior succeeds in his mission. The passion with which he regards his task somehow reminds me of St. John from Jane Eyre :)
ReplyDeleteAnd five sentence fiction, that's new to me! And I like it! :D
You can try this form too ... it's fun and challenging :-)
DeleteThis is amazing!! I cannot believe it is only five sentences.
ReplyDeleteThanks Sara :-)
DeleteWonderful try Greeny! A very vibrant theme where you framed the words so aptly. You are indeed an intense writer. Hats off to you buddy :) May he succeed with all his might !:)
ReplyDeleteThank you so much Tanya :-)
DeleteMy eyes grew wide open when I read the last sentence! wahahahahahahah! Deep but fathomable. Nice!
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Thanks Mr Key, and welcome back :-)
Deletewow! that's awesome. Concept, brevity yet is conveying so much! Best of luck to him and you!
ReplyDeleteThank you ma'am :-)
DeleteWonderful take on the fast approaching date of trepidation... a savior, yes, that's what is clearly needed!
ReplyDeleteThanks Josie :-)
Deletei guess i am here for the first time . and i feel i should have been here earlier ! you write so well . such beautiful choice of words ! loved it . . will be back for more :)
ReplyDeleteThank You Maliny ... Do keep visiting :-)
DeleteReminds me of a time traveler movie ... truth is often stranger than fiction :)
ReplyDeleteWhat you say is true :-)
DeleteI liked this very much - would like to read a longer version to see how things work out!
ReplyDeleteSure ... I would try :-)
DeleteI really enjoyed this and love the flow.
ReplyDeleteThanks Kate :-)
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