(Image Source: http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Sunset)
in hues orange and
silvery red
we greeted the sunset
on this deathbed
when time trickled
like shadowy drops
and world enacted
those staged props
came our promises
of togetherness, forever
separation would be
oh never, oh never
you held my hands
and whispered sweet kisses
life has been long, and short
with blessed wishes and dreaded misses
and as the sun swam past the lake
birds rushed home amidst clouds and waves
you looked into my eyes, and I knew it then
a silent wind blew, and I couldn't fathom when
love was this, in sparkling glitter
a journey that was sweet, sour and bitter
and yet it was us, and it was true
it was me, and it was you
we remained still, but time flew
our breathes wouldn't last, this we knew
and with every sweeping tide the sunset grew
teaching us life, and gifting us death
a mystic puzzle, and we never find the clue
This Poem is shared with Poetry Jam - Sunset.
Philosophical! :)
ReplyDelete"with every sweeping tide the sunset grew:..this is chilling and poignant....
ReplyDelete"life has been long, and short
ReplyDeletewith blessed wishes and dreaded misses" - I love this because it captures the essence of life doesn't it? And I love how his thoughts on the deathbed were all about love. Because in the end, that's all that really matters...
Very true Keith :-)
Delete... sigh. There is so much that passes through one's mind and heart when facing our mortality ... or watching another do the same.
ReplyDeleteI agree Susan :-)
Deletenice...i like the image of the sun swimming by the lake...it does have a cool effect when the horizon is water....life is like that as well...with blessings and misses.....
ReplyDeleteI loved the way you defined it :-)
DeleteGreeting the sunset on deathbed ... incredibly moving.
ReplyDelete... brings tears to my eyes.
ReplyDeleteThank You Laurie :-)
DeleteIndeed life and death are mystic and have to be experienced. a philosophical poem.
ReplyDeleteThanks :-)
DeleteThis is lovely the way you dance life and death into nature. Great poem.
ReplyDeleteThank You :-)
DeleteVery beautifully written..
ReplyDeleteAbout love and loss.. about life and death...
And I loved those surprise rhyming...
They added to the beauty of the poem :)
love and loss ya Life is a mystic puzzle!! emotional to the core..your writing is awakening of the dead spirits!! Smiles green speck:))
ReplyDeleteThank You so much Adhi :-)
Deleteteaching us life, and gifting us death
ReplyDeletea mystic puzzle, and we never find the clue
I loved loved these lines! What a poem!
Thank You :-)
Delete*blown away*
ReplyDeleteThanks Crystal :-D
DeleteAmazing :)
ReplyDeleteThank you Jyotsna :-)
DeleteThis is a sweeping poem, like a panoramic photo. There is mush in this, not just a pretty description of a sunset.
ReplyDeleteThanks Nicholas :-)
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