The clouds bellowed, lightning struck, and it rained thunder, the lazy downpours doing little to extinguish the fiery passion that engulfed the two of them. Walls crumbled, gobbled by the intensity of the fire that consumed the cosmos. Pain turned to pleasure, and pleasure to addiction, as the globe shook repeatedly under their shuddering delight.
The key, the sole witness, hung lifelessly at the door. Little did they know, that his wife had returned earlier than expected, and was walking towards their Eden.
The key shrieked, they moaned, and lights turned on.
His wife stood at the door, horrified, transfixed.
This 100 words Microfiction is shared with Friday Fictioneers - They Key.
The key, the sole witness, hung lifelessly at the door. Little did they know, that his wife had returned earlier than expected, and was walking towards their Eden.
The key shrieked, they moaned, and lights turned on.
His wife stood at the door, horrified, transfixed.
This 100 words Microfiction is shared with Friday Fictioneers - They Key.
This one excels, as usual, in perfect use of words and intrigue. You have done a great job again :)
ReplyDeletePoor wife!A great build up -loved the atmosphere and the climax-no pun intended:-)
ReplyDeleteThank You Atreyee :-)
DeleteCrisply worded!!
ReplyDeleteThanks Reshma :-)
DeleteShort and crisp!!! Excellent!
ReplyDeleteThank You :-)
Deletewow. so well written!
ReplyDeleteThanks Aayesha :-)
DeleteBrilliant as usual. :)
ReplyDeleteThank You :-)
DeleteHow do you write so well?
ReplyDeleteWow ... thanks a lot :-)
DeletePoor wife...and a great capture.
ReplyDeleteThanks Ayala :-)
DeleteThat's going to be an awkward moment... :)
ReplyDeleteSure ;-)
DeleteExcellent 100 ... *claps*
ReplyDeleteThank You Namrota :-)
DeleteBang on! Loved how you built up the suspense. Brilliant as usual :)
ReplyDeleteThanks buddy :-)
DeleteOoooops!!!! Its the wife again??? :)
ReplyDeleteYeah ;-)
DeleteDear Amrit,
ReplyDeleteSo much for paradise. The gates of hell are about to open and swallow them. Well done.
And, I believe, a welcome to Friday Fictioneers is in order. I look forward to reading more of your work.
Shalom,
Rochelle
Thanks a lot Rochelle :-)
DeleteWhat a built up !! Well worded Mr. Sinha :P
ReplyDeleteThanks Ms. Bhatia :-)
Delete