She smiled at his picture, his deep eyes, passionate and brimming with life, making her weak at her knees.
It was their fifth marriage anniversary, and she had made the arrangements - cakes, flowers and champagne, to celebrate their love and togetherness.
As the clock struck seven, she got up from the bed - he would be back home soon, and she wanted to look the best for him today.
The doorbell didn't ring, neither the phone, but it rained, like that eventful night, when moments had come knocking into her life, as she saw the lifeless body of his being slowly carried away in an ambulance, numb, desolate and in white, exactly three years ago.
She waited with the cake and the candles; her love will bring him back to her, she knew, one day, someday; and till then, she would just live with the moments that were gifted to her, full of tears and the red dusk of hope.
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It was their fifth marriage anniversary, and she had made the arrangements - cakes, flowers and champagne, to celebrate their love and togetherness.
As the clock struck seven, she got up from the bed - he would be back home soon, and she wanted to look the best for him today.
The doorbell didn't ring, neither the phone, but it rained, like that eventful night, when moments had come knocking into her life, as she saw the lifeless body of his being slowly carried away in an ambulance, numb, desolate and in white, exactly three years ago.
She waited with the cake and the candles; her love will bring him back to her, she knew, one day, someday; and till then, she would just live with the moments that were gifted to her, full of tears and the red dusk of hope.
This Five Sentence Fiction is shared with Five Sentence Fiction - Moments.
I I love melancholy...
ReplyDeleteAnd this renders just that...
So touchy!
Thanks Satya :-)
DeleteSo beautiful and touching it is...
ReplyDeleteYou really have the ability to say a lot in lesser words (I know i am repeating this, but its what i always feel while reading your posts)
Thanks a lot Priyanka :-)
DeleteThis very touching and painful.
ReplyDeleteThank You Ma'am :-)
DeleteSad yet so nicely written
ReplyDeleteLove the composition :)
Thanks Ankita :-)
DeleteOh such pain!
ReplyDeletekhoob bhaalo hoyechhe.
Dhonnyobaad :-)
DeleteTouching...
ReplyDelete:-(
DeleteMelancholic, but awfully relatable. Well done.
ReplyDeleteThanks a lot :-)
DeleteI almost thought that she was going to find out that he had been in an accident this night.. but come to find out it happened three years ago.. and she's waiting for him.. What a ghostly tale.. you could do more with this later on.. Well done!
ReplyDeleteThanks Crystal :-)
DeleteQuite Poignant. While it's wonderful she's remembered this special day of five years ago. It's also quite heartbreaking she'd lost him on the second anniversary on what must have been a wondrous marriage. We've got no control what happens in each moment of our lives, but when it does, it will always be remembered for the rest of it, EXTREMELY well done !!! :-) :-) :-)
ReplyDeleteThank You Robin :-)
DeleteSo sad..., but your delicate piece of poetic prose is very well written.
ReplyDeleteHe will come back, hope not too late.
My best wishes for this new-born year!
:)
Thanks Dulcina :-)
DeleteAhh!! This is so sad and touching!!
ReplyDeleteThank You Valli :-)
Deleteheart wrenching...life can be so cruel...
ReplyDeleteSo sad and so beautifully written. I like the hint of hope in them being together again, someday. x
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Thanks Lizzie :-)
DeleteSad, lonely, and yet full of hope. That's a difficult combination to express, but you have done it here.
ReplyDeleteThank You Smith :-)
DeleteReally captures the loneliness and pain. Beautiful.
ReplyDeleteThanks Roisin :-)
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