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that glint
reading his letters
a key to her present
as her nails chart the words
in a single stroke of love
somewhere in the sea
she knows, he must be visioning
them in galactic pleasure
together, in moonlit embraces
when eyes kiss nectar
on sultry rose petals
the player of her dreams
gifting her moments
"attach them to the beads
and keep them safe
yes, those promises"
scratch, scratch
her pen on paper
blotting what is left unsaid
thoughts confine to meandering syllables
"It isn't raining yet"
"We are short of grain"
"Laxmi wants a new doll"
"Bholu came first in class"
"When are you returning?"
"Missing you"
"A lot"
"I went to the doctor, today"
"Come soon fast"
"You are going to become a father"
through the open window
the wind laughs naughtily
teasing her
or was it him
caressing her half open tresses
that smell of mahogany
and the cool ocean breeze
oh, but why this malice
the wind, once playful
now changes its course
in utter disdain
and a pungent hatred
it rains, and monstrous thunders approach
the waves flying high
engulfing the level
once, an assurance
now, tasting salt
and miserable death
the ship
a prey to this phase
of lives lost
never to be regained
and she waits
for his letters
"ah, he would be thrilled"
she knows
alas
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Awesome as usual :)
ReplyDeleteThanks Jyotsna :-)
DeletePainful letter... May God bless her and gives her all strength she needs :(
ReplyDeleteKhooob bhalo and a coincidence I wrote a letter like poetry today and in Bengali!
ReplyDeleteWow ... Waiting to read that :-)
Deletewonderful story telling in this...and i like how you use the storm and nature to show the emotions as well...what a letter eh? they can def do that....
ReplyDeleteThanks Brian :-)
DeleteSuperrrr!!! :D
ReplyDeleteBeautiful and heartfelt composition.
Dear Emerald,
Since you write so good I can't be your poetry teacher. I really don't deserve to be ...sorry:)
Keep writing!
Thanks Simi :-)
Deleteya, and that's how the cookie crumbles ... sometimes ... hopefully not for them
ReplyDeleteYes ... that's how life is :-)
DeleteI like your inclusion of sound and direct speech in this poem - gives it an added dimension.
ReplyDeleteThank You Kerry :-)
DeleteI liked how you put this story together.
ReplyDeleteThanks Peggy :-)
Deletevery interesting piece!
ReplyDeleteZQ
Thank You :-)
DeleteBrilliant! I really enjoyed this Amrit! The intensity, how it builds up until you're devastated!! Thank you for sharing!
ReplyDeleteI like the conversation aspect of your poem ~ Good one Amrit ~
ReplyDeleteThank You Grace :-)
DeleteUnbelievably beautiful and sad, no doubt emphasized by witnessing the communication between them.
ReplyDeleteThis really tells a terrific story!
ReplyDeleteThank You Mary :-)
DeleteThe story here is one we don't like to hear. Fortunately there is a large percentage having a happy ending that we all wanted here.
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Very true Jim :-)
DeleteLiked how you crafted this one. The conversations and the pain, the dreams and the love.
ReplyDeleteAmazing you are!
Ah, Amrit this poem is so poignant !! It touched the heart. In what mood did you write it?
ReplyDeleteI wrote it in a happy mood though :p
DeleteI really like the quotes you have included... The disconnected connection really drives the story forward
ReplyDeleteThanks Bjorn :-)
DeleteYou write a silicate as a drifting wind and yet the content of those letters is dark as a storm ahead..lovely work!
ReplyDeleteThank You Jae :-)
DeleteDamn auto correct - don't know what silicate is - I meant to say delicately!
ReplyDeleteHa ha ... I got it :-)
DeleteOh wow, one of the best conversations that I have read. Loved it! You sure are the master of words! :)
ReplyDeleteThanks Soumya ... you are very kind :-)
DeleteSo beautiful and sad...her waiting on him, while not knowing that the sea claimed his soul...
ReplyDeleteThank You Keith :-)
DeleteAwesome write, Amrit!
ReplyDeleteThis is awesome!!!
ReplyDeleteThank You Kathy :-)
DeleteOne of the best i came across in recent times! So touching and stirring..loved it Amrit :)
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