Saturday, December 01, 2012

Young Hope




The cold waking life
Upon the lovely earth
Continuing
Hope for higher Heaven
I' the summer sky
In my very heart
Imagining
What more could I have seen?
My spell - the chilly wind on the moon
Shone too coldly - let it pass
I have dreams in delirious eyes
Of Paradise and Love
And
All our young hope.



This Erasure is shared with dVerse - Erasure Poetry.








47 comments:

  1. Amrit this is so good! You did it nicely...A lovely poem.....

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  2. pardon my ignorance, but is this too a form of poetry??

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    1. Yes it is ... Even I came to know about this form of poetry today, and thus goes my attempt :-)

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  3. Your poem has a freshness to it, Amrit... there is youthfulness and vibrancy to it. :)

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  4. A unique way to pen down your ideas... Really beautiful friend :) Keep doing more such stuff :) Take care!

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  5. nice...just fished your comment out of the spam filter at dVerse..love that you chose poe as a source...love the dreams in delirious eyes...
    if you want some more comments, you could try and visit others that took the challenge, comment on their erasure poem and leave your link.. just a suggestion..smiles

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    1. Thanks for this lovely comment Claudia :-)

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  6. I am fascinated with this form .. had not known about it until I read Brian's poem earlier this week. I'm experimenting with it now ... your erasure poem is awesome!!!

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  7. Very, VERY well done! You do great justice to the form!

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  8. some really cool lines you created...the cold waking life....dreams in delirious eyes....it is a very cool erasure...and fitting for poe as well...smiles.

    snuck your link in...

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  9. Very fitting for Poe - and really well done.

    K.

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  10. Ah, Poe. My favourite writer. Nice one.

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  11. Wow! Well done on a new form of poetry. :)

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  12. This is an interesting result ~ Poe is also one of my favorite writers ~

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  13. Spectacular job ,mate!! keep it up :)

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  14. ery, very nice erasure of Poe's poem. Lovely!

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  15. This is fantastic, a distillation that sings. You use the silences to enhance atmosphere and intrigue. Thanks so much for joining us!

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  16. oh my...this poem really touched me deeply! What a lovely poem! This has become one of my favorites ! Thanks so much for sharing this enlightening poem.
    Keep it up.

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  17. I really like the way you did this. Beautiful poem.

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  18. a unique style of writing dat can capture the mind so fast...nicely written friend:)...GOD LOVE U

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  19. Wow! Amrit, very nice. I don't believe you are attempting this form for the first time!

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  20. I love your writing and I appreciate the way you laid this out for your readers. Thank you

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  21. You,ve done it so well GS, nice eraser!

    Hank

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  22. cold waking life
    Upon the lovely earth

    Intriguing image... and the closing with young hope. Nicely done.

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