Thursday, December 06, 2012

The Savior

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He seemed oblivious to the green mist that threatened to entrap him in its meandering waves, thus deviating him from the true purpose of his arrival, and rendering him a failure.

However, his heart brimmed with unwavering faith and conviction, and he knew no obstacle could obstruct the sole purpose of his life now; he, the new Savior of mankind.

Time was running fast, and that's what he had to stop - yes, he was here to steal time, to avoid the inevitable, and not just delay it.

Today the phoenix would rise from its ashes, the scars would heal, and the world would bow to his acts, only if he accomplished this mission.

He had to get on with the task, and complete it before the calender turned to the fateful day, that would be tomorrow, the 21st of December, 2012.


This Five Sentence Fiction is shared with Five Sentence Fiction.




44 comments:

  1. A modern adaptation of Noah's ark eh? very innovative, must say :) well written buddy!!

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    1. Thanks buddy ... you interpreted it in a magnificent way :-)

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  2. To stop time...to delay the inevitable. What an excercise in futility eh? :)

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  3. Nice one. I like it :)
    I went down the same road in Illusion of Time.

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  4. These five sentences really sums up the plot...felt just like reading a good blurb. Loved the elements of magic realism too.You have really mastered the art of writing fiction. Well done !

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    1. Thanks so much S. I just try to do my best :-)

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  5. I hope he succeeds. My daughter's birthday is the 22nd.

    Very dreamy.

    Cheers!
    JzB

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    1. Don't worry. He is there to succeed :-)

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  6. I like it very much... I'm sure we'll all wake up on the 22nd and wonder what the heck we all were thinking...lol
    Great poem :)

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  7. Fve of the most amazing and wonderfully written sentences I've ever read!!! You did a great job on this!!!

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    1. This is really a big big compliment ... thanks Crystal :-)

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  8. There is an intense worry here, but still a hope as well....great work for the prompt Green Speck!! :-)

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  9. Let's hope he succeeds in his task. Otherwise, Are we ready? Wonderful write, so suspenseful, with a touch of melancholy and much hope.

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  10. hmm - very si-fi :-), but I like your word choice :-)

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  11. Not worrying about waking up on the 22nd or 23rd or 24th. We have heard these prophecies before....just my take.

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    1. Yup ... we shouldn't take these seriously :-)

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  12. Powerful words I must say. Hope this new savior succeeds in his mission. The passion with which he regards his task somehow reminds me of St. John from Jane Eyre :)
    And five sentence fiction, that's new to me! And I like it! :D

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    1. You can try this form too ... it's fun and challenging :-)

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  13. This is amazing!! I cannot believe it is only five sentences.

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  14. Wonderful try Greeny! A very vibrant theme where you framed the words so aptly. You are indeed an intense writer. Hats off to you buddy :) May he succeed with all his might !:)

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  15. My eyes grew wide open when I read the last sentence! wahahahahahahah! Deep but fathomable. Nice!

    I'm back!

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    1. Thanks Mr Key, and welcome back :-)

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  16. wow! that's awesome. Concept, brevity yet is conveying so much! Best of luck to him and you!

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  17. Wonderful take on the fast approaching date of trepidation... a savior, yes, that's what is clearly needed!

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  18. i guess i am here for the first time . and i feel i should have been here earlier ! you write so well . such beautiful choice of words ! loved it . . will be back for more :)

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    1. Thank You Maliny ... Do keep visiting :-)

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  19. Reminds me of a time traveler movie ... truth is often stranger than fiction :)

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  20. I liked this very much - would like to read a longer version to see how things work out!

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  21. I really enjoyed this and love the flow.

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