Sunday, February 10, 2013

And There You Are

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Somewhere down the line
I retrace my path
And there you are.

Moments of tears
Smiles and fears
Somewhere down the line.

Running behind time
My words fail to rhyme
I retrace my path.

Love and trust
Brown eyes of thirst
And there you are.


PSThis is a poem in the cascade form, where each line of the first stanza is used in sequence as the ending line of succeeding stanzas, line one ending the second, line two the third, etc.






46 comments:

  1. Great!!! And this is how a poetry should be written!

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  2. Lovely weaving of lines ~ I specially like

    My words fail to rhyme
    I retrace my path.

    Thanks for linking up with Real Toads ~

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  3. gorgeous, especially the second stanza which really speaks to me

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  4. I love this post !!! :)) Yours. Have a nice weekend.

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  5. What an exceptional piece...just wow ..

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  6. You really got into the essentials of the form here--I like it best in short phrases such as you've used, as it makes the repeating lines all that much more effective--and some lovely lines they are--I especially like the final stanza. Thanks.

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  7. This one is so in-line with the Valentine mood in the air these days.. loved it!

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    1. Now that you say it, I feel it too :-)

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  8. Oh, I love yours! I love the repetition and how effectively you did this challenge~ <3 it :D

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  9. That had a real joy of a delighted discovvery at the end.

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  10. Beautiful verses flow effortlessly from your pen...Simply wonderful!!

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    1. Thank You Reshma ... I am glad you like my work :-)

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  11. lovely words...nice lines!

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  12. hello yar And there u r & my good prayers that u must b always there with ur mesmerizing heart touching poems...GOD<3U

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  13. Love the movement of this one. You are such a talented poet. ;-)

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  14. ... and there you are. I love this!!!

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  15. Lovely! I do like the repetition ... and there you are :)

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  16. Beautiful. And feels so comforting that he (she?) is there...

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    1. I agree ... it always feels lovely :-)

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  17. I LOVE this! you made it look easy, and it is not. Well done!

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  18. Yes, you made this seem so easy...great piece!!

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  19. So beautiful and crafty, both the form and the feeling!

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  20. My favorite line: "Brown eyes of thirst"

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