Thursday, March 03, 2016

Secrets The Ocean Hides

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she had been to the ocean once
to shed her tears and cry
the goodbye was as bad as 'Bad'
oh why did he leave her, why?

his birthday just a week away
she gifted him sole betrayal
this ocean did drown him in lies
he lost himself being loyal


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20 comments:

  1. Beautifully penned ...as bas as bad :)

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  2. Love the progression in this poem the emotion is raw and can be felt through the lines.
    Powerfully expressed! Thank you so much for participating at Prompt Nights :D

    Lots of love,
    Sanaa

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  3. This could be put to music and sung. Very lyrical.

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  4. what a lovely expression....

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  5. Good thing oceans can absorb tears. Lovely, Amrit.

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  6. lovely poem! last two lines are mind blowing however I think- 'oh why did he leave her, why?' shouldn't it be 'oh why did she leave him, why?'

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    1. Thanks Ankita. Actually the two paragraphs are different - one from the view of the girl, the other of the guy :-)

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  7. So sad...ohh..so sad. You penned your thoughts so awesomely and believe me, your poem such as this one touches the hearts of your readers. You never fail, Amrit.

    Thank you for sharing your poetic thoughts. :)

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