Saturday, March 23, 2013

Fortitude



she discards petals
which bloomed once in love
now shrivels alone

farewell past
you gave her smiles, and then
took them back

she marches ahead
bravely defying her tears
smiling tomorrow


This Haiku is shared with Haiku Heights - Fortitude.






50 comments:

  1. so much sadness in the first one! but it compensates in the last one when expressing that resolution! beautifully penned set, Speck!

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  2. lovely take on the prompt. I can feel the melancholy and see her smile by the end. Nice.

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  3. Sometimes a person just has to go on and leave the past behind. And it seems this is what she is able to do.

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    1. I hope she finds a better future :-)

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  4. ...i always wonder who 'she' is that often appears in your poetry.... she seemed to have a consistent character in every poem you wrote about her... i like most the second one in its pure quality of brokeness... smiles...

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    1. Thanks Kelvin ... I guess we all write with a character in mind that may be real :-)

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  5. Nicely done - fortitude well captured.

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  6. Lovely, positve triptych, Specky. Salute!

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  7. So much sorrow yet so hopeful! Loved it.

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  8. You've captured fortitude in your verses ! Bravo!

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  9. The picture matches perfectly with your poem. Love it!

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  10. Walking on, despite the thorns, takes inner strength! Descriptive haiku!

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  11. Happy ending...great..you brought that out well :)

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  12. I like this romance, the flow of words, the narrative. Alice

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  13. I like it, G.S. Not that I am happy with the story but rather I like the way you wrote it.

    My favorite line is "farewell past(,) you gave her smiles which is a bright side to the poem. But it didn't last, did it? Very cruel, the taking away.
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  14. I loved both the picture and the haiku. Very well expressed.

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  15. I really connected to the last haiku

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  16. It does take a lot of courage to 'go on'. SO well-written, Amrit!

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  17. Quiet determination in the face of adversity - I like it :)

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  18. "smiling tomorrow" - wonderful last line that pulls all the feelings together.

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  19. when the going gets tough, the tough get going!!resurgent lines esp the last verse, fabulous piece GS:)

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    1. You quoted it perfectly ... thanks Reshma :-)

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  20. This set flows together like a sad love story. Beautiful!

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