Monday, March 18, 2013

Wild Pebbles



wild pebbles
swim across stream of spring
in untamed valley

in untamed valley
Adam and Eve chase birds
red cherry blushes


This Haiku is shared with Carpe Diem - Onitsura's Valley Stream.





52 comments:

  1. hey ram,
    and the rest you know...:)

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  2. ha...interesting...wild pebbles is a cool though...there is a bit of magic in the first...and the second is a fun thought....

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  3. Pebbles in a stream...reminds me of being a youngster and playing in the stream by my house :)

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  4. Wonderful haiku set Green. Thank you for sharing. I can hear the stream.

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  5. Untamed valleys have a certain allure for me...

    Singing Stone

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    1. Yes they are depicted in your pics :-)

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  6. lovely cascading haiku ~ Enjoy ^_^

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  7. beautiful.. love the image of swimming pebbles and red cherry blush

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  8. very cool images you've created .... love the way you've personified the pebbles and the cherry!

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  9. enticing images...love the 'red cherry blush'!:)

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  10. Wonderful cascades,GS! There's a strange cool effect in an untamed valley!

    Hank

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  11. .. tiny pebbles do swim accross along with streams... ah,love the magical motion in there... smiles...

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  12. Untamed really draws me into your poem. The wilderness can be so nourishing in its solitude!

    23:6

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  13. that untamed valley... how many secrets would it spill if it could!

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  14. Excellent Lines! Loved the way ur thoughts seamlessly flow from one verse to another!!

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  15. wild pebbles is a marvelous thought.

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  16. I love pebbles, and I love this haiku :)

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  17. This really refreshes me!

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  18. Nice string here, G.S. The wild pebbles and Adam and Eve have the red cherry blushing, even here in the untamed valley. Vivid!

    wild pebbles
    swim across stream of spring
    in untamed valley

    in untamed valley
    Adam and Eve chase birds
    red cherry blushes
    ..

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  19. aloha Green Speck. i like the pebbles that are carried along in your stream. great observation. aloha.

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  20. I liked the concept, Adam and Eve chasing birds in untamed valley, may be there is no fear of expulsion.

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    1. Perhaps that was the case then :-)

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  21. Liked the freedom pulsating in those lines . Perfect choice of words to heighten the spirit too :)

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  22. Sometimes thoughts make us feeble.
    This is one of those encounters.
    Maybe it's not in the words, in the depth maybe.

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  23. There's something about a gushing stream that energizes the tired mind...
    loved the red-cherry-blush :)

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  24. And they flee,
    And they flee,
    To a yonder valley
    where they sin
    By gulping the red cheery :) :)

    Nicely concocted....

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    1. Thanks for the wonderful addition Ritwika :-)

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