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I stand against the thunder
Guarding my excuses
With the makeshift umbrella
As I vowed never to go back
Hating the picture
Of what I have become
Deceit joined with lies
My delicious flavors
Stinging me deeper
Within this stupid conscience
Why the world shifts so sudden
The axis tilting me away
Deviating the path of light
The dawn will come late
As the sun mocks at my misery
I inherit the pains
The sufferings are my deeds
But now I look forward
To a new birth
The return of virgin childhood
Embracing me with love
And care
And promises
This dawn is worth waiting for.
Every one has a comeback poem...a rise from the poem....
ReplyDeleteYours is unique and forceful...I expreienced the same many a time Im down!
Thanks Aravind :-)
DeleteOptimistic!!
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Thank You Anu :-)
DeleteThe sufferings are my deeds
ReplyDeleteBut now I look forward
To a new birth
So much to look forward to. Things are rosy the way we make it. A new birth, a new beginning! Nicely Green!
Hank
So hopeful!! I really enjoyed this poem and seeing how you folded all the words into it so skillfully!
ReplyDeleteSo inspiring! I especially love that part "But now I look forward
ReplyDeleteTo a new birth The return of virgin childhood"
Thanks Dana :-)
DeleteDawn and new light is always a welcome sight, full of the promise of new and better beginnings. Thanks for visiting my site,
ReplyDeleteElizabeth
Thank You Elizabeth :-)
DeleteForgive ourselves and move on. Great poem with a sense of anticipation of a new start.
ReplyDeleteThanks Tigerbrite :-)
Deletewhew...i am glad for the turn in the end....the beautiful thing in life is that we can change...i think the realization that we need to is the first step....and then that dawn....
ReplyDeleteVery well said :-)
DeleteI enjoy it when you write a long poem like this, GS. Well wordled, and very meaningful. I think we all go through some difficult times, unfortunately, and perhaps make some mistakes as we travel through life; but I love the optimistic ending here, the embracing the self with love and experiencing a new dawn, new beginning.
ReplyDeleteThis spoke very clearly, deeply to me of the human experience and the need we have to be forgiven, to forgive ourselves and to begin again.
ReplyDeleteThank You Victoria :-)
DeleteWhat can I add that those before me have not already said? Welcome to Wordles!
ReplyDeleteSome of us are lucky to be able to change ourselves earlier than later in life.
I think poetry offers poets the chance to be children again, and again.
My Wordle is here:
http://julesgemsandstuff.blogspot.com/2012/10/sunday-whirl-78-new-recruit.html
You have said it perfectly ... thanks for this warm welcome :-)
DeleteHi, liked the positive closure...being a child again is something worth waiting for indeed..
ReplyDeleteI truly agree with you ... thanks so much :-)
DeleteCan't wait for tomorrow...!
ReplyDeleteTomorrow is a new day :-)
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