Sunday, June 09, 2013

Together, And Soon

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Stars twinkle a thousand magical words
Weaved, bred, tuned, in sync with the angel's song
Swim and fly alongside the rainbow birds
A white packet of smile, red box of hope
This is the land where you truly belong
Hey, sway to the beat, hold on to the rope
Romancing the mermaids on silent moon
Sleep well dear, nothing can ever go wrong
Dreams we will make true, together, and soon.

Note: This is my first attempt in writing a Nocturna. The Nocturna is basically a nine line poetry form based on the nocturne theme containing three, three line lessons recited during the night. The subject must be nocturnal and it consists of three couplets linked by the rhyme of the center line. There are ten syllables per line. The rhyming pattern is "a. b. a. c. b. c. d. b. d."

This Poem is shared with IGWRT - Sunday Mini Challenge - Nocturna.


  1. oooh, very very lovely. very.

  2. Hi Amrit,
    I like the enthusiastic tone, positive set of your palette!

  3. I love it, beautiful poem full of beauty!

  4. Nice and romantically explicated poem. Best of luck with your attempt. I am surely you've done justice to the form of poetry. God bless you :)

  5. aha...very beautiful imagery!! Oh, Nocturna is not easy to write...:)

  6. Romancing the mermaids on silent moon - great line, great poem and great form !!!

  7. Neat format ... I learned something, Mr.G ... but curious as I am, I do have to know what the following means (A white packet of smile, red box of hope) ... my imagination is running wild ... could it be ? ... Na ...:) it couldn't :)

    1. Imaginations frame the world you see :-)

  8. Very romantic GS ~ I like the rhyme linked words: song, belong, wrong ~

    You aced the form in the first attempt ~

    Thank you for participating in Sunday's Challenge ~

    Have a good week ~

  9. This is such a good line: "A white packet of smile, red box of hope".

    ~ M

  10. Beautiful. I love the promise in the last two lines.

  11. I love the colors assigned the packet and box. Really makes me want to go to bed now and dream, I probably should :)

  12. I was just going to comment on the "red box of hope," I love sister beat me to it!! Ha ha! Great poem!

  13. Beautiful...I so love the opening lines.

  14. Very beautiful...who will not want to dream so...thanks for the info too...

  15. lovely and beautiful. Amen! :)

  16. A white packet of smile, red box of hope

    Loved this particular line so much :)

  17. You do keep getting better and better and innovatively so... Loved this journey to the dreamland :)

  18. This is something new for me and I must say it's so beautifully written. Congrats, Amrit! :)