Very nicely composed, however, the syllables of the lines make 4-6-5, my knowledge says the pattern is not right. Please check it and correct me if I am wrong :)
The syllable pattern is actually meant for Japanese Haiku. When you write an English Haiku, you do not need to stress on the syllables, as that makes the Haiku heavier :-)
Devotion make weary feet a little less weary don't they? Awesome Haiku Amrit.
ReplyDeleteexcellent. Love the devoted feet.
ReplyDeleteThank You Lolly :-)
DeleteBeautiful! Thank you!
ReplyDeleteVery nicely composed, however, the syllables of the lines make 4-6-5, my knowledge says the pattern is not right. Please check it and correct me if I am wrong :)
ReplyDeleteThe syllable pattern is actually meant for Japanese Haiku. When you write an English Haiku, you do not need to stress on the syllables, as that makes the Haiku heavier :-)
DeleteNice effect of 'feet brimming with devotion'.
ReplyDeleteThanks Usha Ji :-)
DeleteYou have expressed the journey beautifully!
ReplyDeleteThank You Satya :-)
DeleteThe 'yatra' though tiring is invigorating.
ReplyDeleteTrue :-)
DeleteBrilliant....as always!
ReplyDeleteThanks Panchali Di :-)
DeleteThe blessings for ourselves that we must seek!! True test of faith!!
ReplyDeleteWell said :-)
DeleteDevotion often gets us where we need to go...
ReplyDeleteHolyseed
I agree :-)
Deletethis is beautiful, Amrit!
ReplyDeleteThanks Celestine :-)
DeleteVery nice! That's a true devotion.
ReplyDeleteThis is a haiku treasure. So beautiful!
ReplyDeleteThanks so much :-)
DeleteThe spirit of devotion overcomes every obstacle ! Nice :-)
ReplyDeleteAbsolutely !!!
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