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had he not eaten the apple
the mirror would have held true
he could have raced to work
after wearing his black shoe
but no, he did eat the apple
a mistake he confessed as his
the serpent couldn't be blamed
this time, it was a fish
who swam up to the shore
gifted him the fruit
go, open your bag of sins, it said
goodness is there to loot
lured by power
a greed so rich
he stuck to the apple
like a blood thirsty leech
how he wished he hadn't eaten the apple
how he wished the mirror could be true
only if he had not strayed his path
he would have fitted aptly in his shoe
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We've all done something we wished we didn't, but that's life. We live and learn.
ReplyDeleteThat's a great piece indeed!
Thank You :-)
DeleteAh, following one's dreams of power or one's greedy ambitions definitely can lead to feelings of regret. But if we do err, we cannot beat ourselves up with 'if only's.' A strong message in your words.
ReplyDeleteThanks Mary :-)
DeleteSuch a great rhyming in this one, to me this looks like the best poem i have ever read.
ReplyDeleteThank You Alok :-)
DeleteLead us not into temptation...trouble is temptation often seems more exciting and fulfilling ..a thoughtful poem...as ever!
ReplyDeleteThanks Jae :-)
DeleteIf the shoe fits I'm afraid we'd have to wear it. I do not blame he man for wanting the apple.
ReplyDeleteThank You Susan :-)
DeleteThought provoking. We often think what if we chose the other option.
ReplyDeleteYes, we can only assume.
DeleteOne must always learn not to give in to temptation.. a wonderfully crafted piece of work :D
ReplyDeleteCheers!
Thanks Sanaa :-)
DeleteNever stray for the wrong reasons, enjoy the apple if you can share.. There is always a good way to follow, where we neither succumb to greed or have to fight our way through bramble.
ReplyDeleteWell said Bjorn :-)
DeleteWow... Superb poem.... :) repent for actions done... But accept it and find what's next :)
ReplyDeleteThanks Shweta :-)
Deleteonce we fall prey to greed we'll have to live inside the words "if only" all our life...nice image of the fish gifting the apple ......
ReplyDeleteBitter truth of life.. But what to do its in our nature, no one can help...
ReplyDeleteI agree Noopur.
DeleteI enjoyed reading this, with its unexpected images........enjoyed the fish wandering into the poem and changing the plot!
ReplyDeleteThanks Sherry :-)
Delete"The Apple" is very sweet rachna. Thanks for sharing.
ReplyDeleteThank You Kahkashan :-)
Deleteooh..a metaphor about the wickedness of life at times. how thought provoking!
ReplyDeleteThanks James :-)
DeleteMakes me contemplate my own regrets.
ReplyDeleteIt does.
DeleteI really enjoyed the metaphor here and the lamenting as it lingers for all of us!
ReplyDeleteAn object lesson!
ReplyDeleteNicely done. I like the different characters here. Don't think he can even blame the fish, we are all responsible for our choices regardless of the temptation. But that sounds harsh, we must all also forgive ourselves our humanness.
ReplyDeleteWhat a parallel to our lives this is. We think we change but really are are the same person inside?
ReplyDeleteWell said my friend.
DeleteWe often think about the way we didn't choose. But no regrets as we already traveling in the chosen path. brilliant lines and I love the rhyme in it. :-)
ReplyDeleteThanks Sabeeha :-)
DeleteSo much beauty, sense and awesomeness in this post!!
ReplyDeleteThis is officially my most favorite post of yours now. :D
Wow, wow and wow!
Thank You so much Soumya :-)
DeleteWe always end up regretting biting the apple.
ReplyDeleteThe poor apple :3
Yes we do :-)
DeleteRegret is the most torturous feeling one can have...
ReplyDeleteNice one!
Thanks Satya :-)
DeleteInteresting twist on the serpent :-)
ReplyDeleteThank You :-)
DeleteApples are soooooooo tempting!! Great piece Amrit!! As always!!
ReplyDeleteThanks Crystal :-)
DeleteLove apples! Nice apple attitude in your poem :)
ReplyDeleteThank You Humbird :-)
DeleteDesire is always driving us for something that could do us wrong.
ReplyDeleteI totally agree.
DeleteAnd you spin words like a master!!
ReplyDeleteWe all can in some way relate to this. Life forces you to relate to this.
Too good! Sorry for being away
Thanks for contributing. Interesting twist on the age old tale. Did the fish mean something different than the serpent?
ReplyDeleteThanks. Just wanted to show that there are evils lurking in forms other than serpent :-)
DeleteThis had me hmmm! And you've made me have a new view of the story I've always known. Thank you! And one must learn never to give in to our moments of weakness.
ReplyDeleteThanks Onomiroro :-)
DeleteInteressting!
ReplyDeleteVery interesting read Amrit! Just, I didn't get the fish in the place of serpent. Does it carry any hidden thought?
ReplyDeleteThanks Tarang ... Just wanted to show that there are evils lurking in forms other than serpent :-)
DeleteOh yes, right! Thanks :)
DeleteFantastic tale to learn from. Too big or too small for his shoes? Ill say too big as pride puffs us up :)
ReplyDeleteThank You Leslie :-)
DeleteThanks Emmanuel :-)
ReplyDeleteBeautifully worded and with a strong message. A very fine poem indeed.
ReplyDeleteThanks Somali :-)
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