Sunday, May 24, 2015

The Apple



had he not eaten the apple
the mirror would have held true
he could have raced to work
after wearing his black shoe

but no, he did eat the apple
a mistake he confessed as his
the serpent couldn't be blamed
this time, it was a fish

who swam up to the shore
gifted him the fruit
go, open your bag of sins, it said
goodness is there to loot

lured by power
a greed so rich
he stuck to the apple
like a blood thirsty leech

how he wished he hadn't eaten the apple
how he wished the mirror could be true
only if he had not strayed his path
he would have fitted aptly in his shoe


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71 comments:

  1. We've all done something we wished we didn't, but that's life. We live and learn.
    That's a great piece indeed!

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  2. Ah, following one's dreams of power or one's greedy ambitions definitely can lead to feelings of regret. But if we do err, we cannot beat ourselves up with 'if only's.' A strong message in your words.

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  3. Such a great rhyming in this one, to me this looks like the best poem i have ever read.

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  4. Lead us not into temptation...trouble is temptation often seems more exciting and fulfilling ..a thoughtful poem...as ever!

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  5. If the shoe fits I'm afraid we'd have to wear it. I do not blame he man for wanting the apple.

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  6. Thought provoking. We often think what if we chose the other option.

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  7. One must always learn not to give in to temptation.. a wonderfully crafted piece of work :D
    Cheers!

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  8. Never stray for the wrong reasons, enjoy the apple if you can share.. There is always a good way to follow, where we neither succumb to greed or have to fight our way through bramble.

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  9. Wow... Superb poem.... :) repent for actions done... But accept it and find what's next :)

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  10. once we fall prey to greed we'll have to live inside the words "if only" all our life...nice image of the fish gifting the apple ......

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  11. Bitter truth of life.. But what to do its in our nature, no one can help...

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  12. I enjoyed reading this, with its unexpected images........enjoyed the fish wandering into the poem and changing the plot!

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  13. "The Apple" is very sweet rachna. Thanks for sharing.

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  14. ooh..a metaphor about the wickedness of life at times. how thought provoking!

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  15. Makes me contemplate my own regrets.

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  16. I really enjoyed the metaphor here and the lamenting as it lingers for all of us!

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  17. Nicely done. I like the different characters here. Don't think he can even blame the fish, we are all responsible for our choices regardless of the temptation. But that sounds harsh, we must all also forgive ourselves our humanness.

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  18. What a parallel to our lives this is. We think we change but really are are the same person inside?

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  19. We often think about the way we didn't choose. But no regrets as we already traveling in the chosen path. brilliant lines and I love the rhyme in it. :-)

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  20. So much beauty, sense and awesomeness in this post!!

    This is officially my most favorite post of yours now. :D

    Wow, wow and wow!

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  21. We always end up regretting biting the apple.
    The poor apple :3

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  22. Regret is the most torturous feeling one can have...
    Nice one!

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  23. Interesting twist on the serpent :-)

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  24. Apples are soooooooo tempting!! Great piece Amrit!! As always!!

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  25. Love apples! Nice apple attitude in your poem :)

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  26. Desire is always driving us for something that could do us wrong.

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  27. And you spin words like a master!!
    We all can in some way relate to this. Life forces you to relate to this.
    Too good! Sorry for being away

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  28. Thanks for contributing. Interesting twist on the age old tale. Did the fish mean something different than the serpent?

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    1. Thanks. Just wanted to show that there are evils lurking in forms other than serpent :-)

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  29. This had me hmmm! And you've made me have a new view of the story I've always known. Thank you! And one must learn never to give in to our moments of weakness.

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  30. Very interesting read Amrit! Just, I didn't get the fish in the place of serpent. Does it carry any hidden thought?

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    1. Thanks Tarang ... Just wanted to show that there are evils lurking in forms other than serpent :-)

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  31. Fantastic tale to learn from. Too big or too small for his shoes? Ill say too big as pride puffs us up :)

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  32. Beautifully worded and with a strong message. A very fine poem indeed.

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