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it rained
on her window pane
a morn of March
the month, insane
when she heard him
stepping out
closing the door behind
her muffled shout
she looks out today
and it rains again
seeking and searching
in missing by-lanes
will he be back
in drizzled tales
her eyes wouldn't lie
her hope shouldn't fail
she prays to the cloud
to preserve those trails
in meandering streams
her paper boat sails
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The paper boat goes out of her sight
ReplyDeleteAnd so does her hope,
She is now forced to acquiesce her fate,
For her a new Candle of Hope awaits
PS: It is raining and the weather is awesome, itne sad na ho jao Amrit ji :) Nice Poem waise :)
Thanks Vaisakhi ... loved your lines :-)
Deleteah...sigh of a sad heart..
ReplyDeletein drizzled tales
ReplyDeleteher eyes wouldn't lie
-> really like that.
in state, faithful lying
Thanks :-)
DeleteNice to read the awesome lines in such a awesome weather :)
ReplyDeleteIts raining in Mumbai as well :)
Thank You Sonia :-)
DeleteSad one. May hopes not be belied.
ReplyDeleteHope he's back...
Thanks Anita :-)
DeleteI think still as long the paper-boat sails on there is hope even in relentless rain.
ReplyDeleteI agree :-)
DeleteThis flowed like a paper boat on a sea of tears..simply beautiful
ReplyDeleteThanks Jae :-)
DeleteI liked that it rained! Although this poem has added a different perspective here... Beautiful!
ReplyDeleteThank You Prajakta :-)
Deletei love paper boats in the drain, of course once the current catches them, they are gone out of sight...so whenyou let go you have to be willing to say goodbye...but there is always hope...
ReplyDeleteHope should be in our hearts always :-)
DeleteWow! This is so melancholy and sweet! I admire the brevity of words. Please visit:
ReplyDeletehttp://njn-sorceress.blogspot.in/2015/03/seasons-and-promises.html?showComment=1425221263335
Thanks Sanjana :-)
Deleteshort sentences, few words and such deep emotions! only you can achieve this Amrit! loved it :)
ReplyDeleteThank You Ankita :-)
Deleteadorable imagery.
ReplyDeleteThanks Rachel :-)
Deletekeep the rain drops falling,
ReplyDeletewe love her imagery.
Thank You Kora :-)
Deletein drizzled tales - i like this, the tears of the heart on the window of life. I can feel the pain, this is excellent.
ReplyDeleteThanks Alan :-)
DeleteI hope he returns...but the poem seems to imply he will not. I enjoyed the ending with the paper boat sailing...I can see it moving toward the horizon.
ReplyDeleteThank You Mary :-)
DeleteI hope she can sail on with her boat. I like the creative images in this very much. Thanks for posting here.
ReplyDeleteThanks Peggy :-)
DeleteLove the rhymes here as they cut through the sorrow and pain of loss and we know that she will or he will sail on.
ReplyDeleteThank You Susan :-)
DeleteVery moving. The fragility of the paper boat she sails in the rain is synonymous with life itself. You have captured a monsoonish mood here. Enjoyed this one.
ReplyDeleteThanks Cressida :-)
DeleteI like how you use pathetic fallacy in your poem thus leading us to understanding that his departure is final.
ReplyDeleteThank You Gabriella :-)
DeleteLovely rhyming and storytelling.
ReplyDeleteThanks Rosemary :-)
DeleteBrilliantly weaved!
ReplyDeleteThank You Susmit :-)
Deletei hope he returns with the sun =)
ReplyDeleteI hope so too :-)
DeleteI hope he comes back for her too.
ReplyDeleteAnna :o]
Thanks Anna :-)
Deletepaper boat imagery is creative.
ReplyDeleteThank You Roessel :-)
Deletewise words.
ReplyDeleteThanks Marcie :-)
DeleteSo amazingly beautiful...
ReplyDeleteSummer rains showering her with many memories!
Beautifully moving, Amrit..
ReplyDeleteBeautiful :)
ReplyDeleteThank You Daneshwari :-)
Deleteamazing imagery.
ReplyDeleteThanks Marissa :-)
Deletelife is tender like a paper boat
ReplyDeleteIt is :-)
Deletewise ending..thanks.
ReplyDeleteThanks Catie :-)
Deleteprayers to cloud to preserve her trails,
ReplyDeletethat's funny thoughts.
Thank You Lucinda :-)
Deletevery funny verse.
ReplyDeletelove the insights.
Thank You :-)
Deletekeep it up.
ReplyDelete:)