Monday, August 26, 2013

A Lonesome Bat

a lonesome bat
hanging from the branches
he knows no friend

he knows no friend
as he flies through the caves
night after night

night after night
he watches the moon
designing the skies

designing the skies
the moon plays with him
hide and seek

hide and seek
one night, the moon was lost
in the maze of clouds

in the maze of clouds
the bat traveled here and there
but in vain

but in vain
hanging from the branches
a lonesome bat


This Haiku is shared with Haiku Heights - Bat.



40 comments:

  1. Loved the cascading haiku. You started with the lonesome bat and ended with the same.

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  2. How beautifully you have depicted the bat's plight!

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  3. I think he is best left there alone on the branches!! Imagine a flock of bats shifting here and there making complex patterns.....eeeeks!!

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  4. Very beautifully written! Poor bat but...after all there are times when it could play hide and seek. :)

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  5. Lovely and expertly written...although I have a fear of bats LOL

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  6. Nice set, Amrit. Enjoyed reading... :)

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  7. I was once bitten I was bitten by a very lonesome,and sick bat, while weeding my flower beds ... I had to go through weeks and weeks of painful shots to ward off rabies ...

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    1. Ohh ... they may be dangerous at times.

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  8. poor lonesome bat
    unloved by mosquitoes
    and fresh fruit

    nice circle or haiku!

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  9. Well done! A full circle tale.

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  10. I enjoyed the interaction of the bat and moon in this poem...yes, and full circle worked well.

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  11. Lonesome? I thought he had the moon by his side, playing with him :D :D
    Nice one :D

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  12. Lovely story poem. Don't worry, the moon is always there.

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  13. Lovely cascade. What a lonely bat. Good transmission of feelings.

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  14. Wow, really good. A bit of darkness, pathos n spook combined into one

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