Wednesday, May 08, 2013

The Sun That Sinks



the sun that sinks
in the blue dissolving skies
like sugar in a teapot
or salt, if you prefer
silently bloating bubbles
that blow hot and cold
as the frozen rays pave the way
to the sands of time
oblivion to fate.


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44 comments:

  1. interesting textures in this...like the contrasts of hot and cold...the fiery sun and water....the last couple lines carry the weight as well...

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  2. I enjoyed this. Love the idea of the sun sinking like sugar in a teapot. I can picture this.

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  3. Very emotive and evocative. "The sands of time"...inescapable sands they are.

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  4. I like the image of dissolving sugar or salt in a teapot ~ It goes on, oblivious to our fates ~

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  5. I love your opening image of the setting sun, and I am left wondering what story is yet to ensue.

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  6. adore your style of writing. very different from much I've read!

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  7. ... never understood why to write on somebodies'/ some societies' prompt ... is it still yours when you do? Hmmm!

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    1. Well it motivates me to write more and more ... at times I feel lost without prompts :-)

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  8. You have wonderful imagery in here. Especially like the comparison of the sunset to sugar.

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  9. Love the imagery here ... a sun like melting sugar sweeter than sweet.

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  10. Well, Björn just said what I was going to say. lol. Beautiful imagery and adored "sun sinking like sugar in a teapot"!

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  11. superlative imagination GS, sugary sun melting in the teapot huh... beautiful, beautiful, beautiful:)

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  12. loved the imagery in there :)

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  13. Rich imagery to savour...nice work buddy :)

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  14. "the sun that sinks
    in the blue dissolving skies"

    I think I've rarely heard or read such a short and perfect description of a sunset.

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  15. sunsets are amazing to watch as they are swallowed up by night time or the sea
    I love your description - perfect

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  16. Love the sun dissolving like sugar in a teapot...such rich imagery in this

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  17. I love the play on fire n' ice!
    The sugar dissolving...love this one
    :D

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  18. Love the salt/sugar, fire/ice, also the internal rhyme in this. The pic of the sun is perfect, but you brought out its perfection in verse, and that's really nice.

    I love sunsets. Used to be, on the beach in Venice, CA, you could almost hear the sun "bloop" its last on the horizon, but now it's too noisy and gentrified. Wish I could see sunset in a more deserted clime. Thanks for the dream/wish! Amy

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    1. I hope your wish comes soon Amy :-)

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  19. Great contrasting images of hot/cold, sweet/sour ... I wonder what happens at sunset? A story to be told :)

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  20. Beautiful images. I just love 'like sugar in a teapot.'

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