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can I have a share
of a mistake with a retake
so that I no longer fear
the consequences of my stake
no more hiding in the kitchen
or a corner for that matter
I shall be loyal to my deeds
not worry what's thereafter
my heart I would follow
and explore all around
I won't be shackled to chains
I hate being thus bound
if rights could be re-done
and wrongs undone
if corrections were justified
and faults dipped to none
we wouldn't have shied away
from learning what's new
we might not have lost our way
stranded without a clue
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That's so rhythmic and in it's own way so beautiful Amrit :) Loved it. You have woven the ifs and the dilemmas impeccably :) :)
ReplyDeleteThank you :)
DeleteI think we learn from errors.. it's just the pain of being burned and the afterward scarring... great thoughts.
ReplyDeleteThanks Bjorn :)
DeleteOh. I do wish we could redo rights and undo wrongs, but it seems to happen vice versa mostly. The dilemma of life quite nicely penned, GS.
ReplyDeleteThanks Leo :)
DeleteI like the form you chose for this, with its rhythm and rhyme......so many if only's in this life........well said.
ReplyDeleteThank You Sherry :)
Deletevery beautiful Amrit...
ReplyDeleteMostof the times, we don't get a second chance to undo our errors and the effect they had in the victim's life. That is irony indeed.
ReplyDeleteWell said Maliny :)
DeleteInteresting ideas worth pondering.
ReplyDeleteThanks Rosemary :)
Deletewe learn from our mistakes... Well penned... :)
ReplyDeleteThank you Arpita :)
DeleteSuch a beautiful thought, well penned
ReplyDeleteThanks :)
DeleteBeautifully penned :)
ReplyDeleteThank you Daneshwari :)
DeleteWonderfully written Amrit!
ReplyDeleteCheers
Thanks Geetika :)
DeleteBeautiful post here. Well written Sir.
ReplyDeleteNo more hiding. That's what acceptance can do. :)
ReplyDeleteWell said :)
DeleteThat is so cheerful poem...
ReplyDeleteThanks Shalet :)
DeleteIf only... I wish!
ReplyDeleteI loved the flow and rhymes in it... :)
Thanks Satya :)
DeleteWow. I love this. Excellent take on the prompt!
ReplyDeleteThank you :)
DeleteO! Philosophical.Meaningful
ReplyDeleteThanks Sarala :)
DeleteThe magic of your pen, Amrit! :)
ReplyDeleteSo thoughtful of you! If only mistakes were acceptable and an inspiration to correct those...things would have been different.
Thanks for participating :)
Thank You Simran :)
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