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I breathe out fog in wintry night
when clouds rob stars away from my sight
and lonely birds chirp and hoot
blindfolded I, point and shoot
I laugh, I cry, I miss my aim
sheared by fear, I'm forever maimed
here is a world where regrets grow
the crack in my heart goes with the flow
and I draw, and build, and rebuild the blocks
unaware of the storm raging my clock
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This is very vivid. I read it twice, really appreciating the birds, the blindfold, the fog, the stars, the regrets.
ReplyDeleteThanks Sherry :-)
DeleteClouds inside the mind, cracks within the heart. Nice portrayal of loneliness.
ReplyDeleteThank You Somali :-)
DeleteI think you write of someone lost deep in depression,, well penned,
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DeleteVery nice, Amrit!
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A well put together piece, delightful to read that.
ReplyDeleteLove the images you put here. Especially the last part.
ReplyDeleteThanks Natasa :-)
DeleteGreat work Amrit.. very intense and vivid images.
ReplyDeleteI like the wonderful images and the beautiful rhythm...
ReplyDeleteThanks Sumana :-)
DeleteBeautifully written, Amrit.
ReplyDeleteThank You Celestine :-)
DeleteA wonderful poem. The feeling of bleak winter is very much there.
ReplyDeleteThanks GL :-)
DeleteThe clock is always ticking but it is so easy to forget that, isn't it.
ReplyDeleteI agree :-)
DeleteWoderful! That much only I say here.
ReplyDeleteThanks Sarala :-)
DeleteVivid and awesome...
ReplyDeleteLoved the tone and the rhymes :)
Thank You Satya :-)
DeleteBeautiful! :)
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