Monday, September 15, 2014

Train

a motion picture
runs through the open window
and a kissing breeze

~ o ~

the caterpillar
rushing across hills and rivers
stories all the way


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42 comments:

  1. I am amazed at the power of few words that trigger a series of imagination in one's mind. Nicely written Amrit.

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  2. I like both of these because they both seem to carry with them a message of change...

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  3. Wonderful, and without using the prompt. Very creative. Well done.

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  4. have a nice Monday, i like the first one more, the surprise at Line 3 is quite nice

    much love...

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  5. Love your haikus. have a great week!

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  6. These two really got me remembering, Amrit. Each year our orchestra "lived on a train" for six weeks. And the stories were, well...ALL THE WAY (as you say!)
    Nicely done, I L I K E.

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  7. A kissing breeze.. that could mean so much..

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  8. A caterpillar... ;) You have a brilliant mind Amrit, I always enjoy reading your work! Be proud of it my friend!

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  9. A lot of fast movements evoked from those involved with slow processes. A caterpillar needs to 'run' fast for all these. Nicely Amrit!

    Hank

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  10. Very beautiful....you captured it in so short words.....nice!!

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  11. As a child I used to imagine that there is this movie playing out side the train's window! Thanks for bringing a part of my childhood back to me

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  12. So aptly written for the prompt! Amazing! Loved your Haiku, Amrit. :)

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  13. The scenes you piece together in such few words :)

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  14. Very nice! Loving the caterpillar. :)

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  15. Loved the way you picturised a running train as a slithering caterpillar Amrit. The thought of kissing breeze made me smile and blush :)

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  16. Love your caterpillar! In fact both are such lovely haiku and great imagery.

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  17. Love the caterpillar also. Inspired original ideas:)

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  18. Awesome takes on the prompt! loved the second one more :)

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