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she had been to the ocean once
to shed her tears and cry
the goodbye was as bad as 'Bad'
oh why did he leave her, why?
his birthday just a week away
she gifted him sole betrayal
this ocean did drown him in lies
he lost himself being loyal
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Beautifully penned ...as bas as bad :)
ReplyDeleteThanks Shweta :-)
DeleteLove the progression in this poem the emotion is raw and can be felt through the lines.
ReplyDeletePowerfully expressed! Thank you so much for participating at Prompt Nights :D
Lots of love,
Sanaa
Thank You Sanaa :-)
DeleteThis could be put to music and sung. Very lyrical.
ReplyDeleteThanks Kerry :-)
DeletePowerful and beautiful!
ReplyDeleteThank You Ayala :-)
Deletewhat a lovely expression....
ReplyDeleteThanks Archana :-)
DeleteLove is a tricky thing!
ReplyDeleteIt surely is :-)
DeleteGood thing oceans can absorb tears. Lovely, Amrit.
ReplyDeleteThank You Sara :-)
Deletelove your use of ocean...
ReplyDeleteThanks a lot :-)
Deletelovely poem! last two lines are mind blowing however I think- 'oh why did he leave her, why?' shouldn't it be 'oh why did she leave him, why?'
ReplyDeleteThanks Ankita. Actually the two paragraphs are different - one from the view of the girl, the other of the guy :-)
DeleteSo sad...ohh..so sad. You penned your thoughts so awesomely and believe me, your poem such as this one touches the hearts of your readers. You never fail, Amrit.
ReplyDeleteThank you for sharing your poetic thoughts. :)
Thank You Balqis :-)
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