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Wednesday, October 17, 2012

The Vacant Cafe




She re-read his letter. Sad, but it was true. She looked around. Even the cafe was vacant, highlighting the desolation playing in her heart.


This Micro-fiction of 140 Characters is shared with Succinctly Yours Week 82.





23 comments:

  1. The emotion of the woman and her life situation at that moment has been nicely conceptualized and you were able to evoke emotions in these few lines.
    Keep writing !

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  2. This is really good...
    Very good!!!

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  3. desolation is felt. Hard to do in so few characters!

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  4. Very well dome, Green Speck!! So much said in so few words!! bravo!! Mine is here
    Have you a BLESSED WEEK!!!
    hugs
    shakira

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  5. The void so articulately sketched! Brilliant...!

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  6. Very nice, G.S. ~~ It sounds like you too have felt at times that you are theonly and last living person on the earth.
    ..

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    1. Ha ha ... I guess all of us have felt it at times :-)

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  7. "Down To My Last Cigarette" ... by k.d lang ... comes to mind ...

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    1. I haven't heard of it, but will surely read it now :-)

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  8. Its sad, told you, guys are heartless, and you proved it here :P
    good one!

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  9. nice take on this week's challenge. take care.

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  10. You packed a lot of emotion into your story. Nicely done and I truly enjoyed it.

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  11. Heartfelt. A vacant cafe definitely highlights the feelings.

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