Thursday, July 05, 2012

True - Haiku

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True nature hidden,
Deception personified,
Traitor comes closer.

Looks into her eyes,
Embracing her among lies,
Her heart full of love.

Silent, dark aura,
He kisses false promises,
Poor, pure, she falls prey.

It's too late to turn,
Shining cheeks, moist with tears, pain,
Cries a muffled song.

She looks up, hopeful,
Can time turn in her favor?
Cruel clock passive.


This Haiku is written for Haiku Heights, and the Prompt is True.







28 comments:

  1. Not fan of haikus... Actually, not quite right, just nit that many I like /get... I love this one though!

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  2. wow! you packed a lot of emotional trauma in that poem!

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    1. Ha ha... Just thought of dramatizing the events a bit :-)

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  3. I like the narrative ~ Pity the prey to fall into lies and false promises ~

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    1. Lies, false promises break many a hearts :-(

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  4. Hi G.S. ~~ I believe this is true, more times than we might think. Guys can't be perfect and many women start getting a fear that they are in a trap that will be hard for them to escape.

    Thank you for peeking in on my 'kite' 'truths' and for you nice comment.
    ..

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    1. This indeed is true ... Thanks for visiting Jim :-)

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  5. Wow! I like this one! 'Deception personified!' Quite thoughtful. Truth is covered with many lies!

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    1. You have to get rid of the lies to reach the truth :-)

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  6. In every stanza, the opposite runs simultaneously. For e.g. "True nature" followed by "hidden"," embracing" followed by "lies", "False followed by promises ", and "hopeful " followed by "cruel clock"
    That is what I love about this haiku.
    keep it up,

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    1. Thank You !!! But that's what I believe life is all about - contrasts, isn't it? :-)

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  7. Hopefully time can be sympathetic to her bidding. Unfortunately deception doesn't. Already with bad intentions time will not make a difference to deception. Great haiku set, Green!

    Hank

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  8. Isn't it a shame what one has to "wade through" before finding true and fulfilling love! Power packed -- much emotion in this piece.

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  9. Lovely haiku.. heartfelt attempt G.S.. I seriously didn't expect you to be such deep writer in terms of haiku at least.. :) you proved me wrong and I gladly accept y fault.. :):):)

    GOOD JOB!

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    1. Wow ... that's an honor :-) Thank you :-)

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  10. I think you are the master of haiku's which is quite odd that I would stumble upon a blogger that writes them so well.. do you realize you are the first that I have seen on blogger that actually writes haiku's? And, I've always understood the meaning of them but writing them is very difficult.. I never could write a haiku. Never!! Writing Haiku's was by far the most difficult challenge I ever faced in creative writing class when I was in high school and since I've studied about them but still, it never clicks.. You are very talented and the fact that you didn't just write one haiku here.. you wrote several which are all related to each other and go very well in the form of a poem here.. It's crazy beautiful!! I want to read all your posts now!! :)

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    1. I am not the master, I am just a learner, and have been trying to improve by reading works of great bloggers like you ... hope you like my other works as well, and provide me suggestions for further improvements :-)

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    2. I don't know if there's anything I would change about your work.. it's very beautiful.. except for the fact that you just have to believe in yourself! You've got it!! I've been writing since I was 12!! And I still can't write a haiku but I like to think of myself as a learner too because one never really can know all there is to know about everything.. I certainly don't.

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    3. That's true, we all have limitations, but we should focus on our strengths :-)

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  11. Loved the set... extremely touching... heart wrenching too..!

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  12. You can feel the innocense and trust, the desire in her true feelings. A lot of emotion in this one. 8)

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    1. Thanks for appreciating Jennifer :-)

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